31 As we acquire more knowledge things do not become more comprehensible but more complex and mysterious | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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31.As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex and mysterious.

The process of obtaining knowledge starts from making things from complex and mysterious to comprehensive, and accordingly with some apprehension of the world, people recognize the limitation of themselves and find things become even more complicated than before.

To begin, from ancient time to the contemporary time, people find many natural phenomena initially mysterious become increasingly simple and understandable. In Chinese ancient myth, the thunder and the lighting are created by the god of thunder and the goddess of lighting using hammers, similarly, according to the Norse Mythology, thunder is also created by a god - Thor. However, with the development of technology, scientists found that thunder is just a series of sound waves produced by the rapid expansion of the air through which the lightning passes. And because light travels faster than sound, there is often a time interval between the flash and the thunder. Therefore, with increasingly advanced scientific detectors, humans can understand the world as well as the society better.

However, when people already grasp some of the knowledge, they may find their own powerlessness towards this world and find “truth” is so far to even see. Like what Zeno of Elea said, “Our knowledge is like a circle. Inside the circle are things you know about, and outside the circle are things you don’t know. The area of the big circle is my knowledge, the area of the small circle is your knowledge, so my knowledge is more than yours. But outside these two circles are things you and I don’t know. The circumference of the big circle is larger than that of the small circle so that I may have more knowledge, but I also realize that there is more I do not know.” When Mendel found the rule of heredity in the 19th century, people at that time was so excited because they believed they have understood the law of nature and human beings. But one and a half hundred years later, people now are confused about whether genetically modified food can be deleterious to humans’ health and genetically altered babies can live as normal infants. There is a truth lying somewhere, but it is not possible for humans to finally get a glimpse of that truth.

Finally, what I want to say is that it is a natural way to acquire knowledge that first realizing your own impotency and then trying to make things less unfathomable. This process is endless, while during that process, humans can enhance themselves and at least get closer to the final “truth”. Take philosophers as an example. For thousands of years, philosophers are trying to understand human beings and the world around us. In ancient times, Plato emphasized the importance of “conscience” and “moral standard”. On the contrary, for philosophers in contemporary time when deconstruction ideas prevail, those moral standards are not born to be followed, but are simply constructions constructed by political elites to form consensus and thus better govern the nation. Those seemly easily apprehensible notions like “benevolence” and “tolerance” now becomes impenetrable to average people under the explanation of contemporary philosophers. But at the same time, this situation means human have developed deeper understanding of the world and the society around us.

In a nutshell, the process that things from being complex to being easier to apprehend, and then to being even more complex can help humans capture a more comprehensive picture of the natural and the secular world.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 36, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
.... However, when people already grasp some of the knowledge, they may find their own powe...
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Line 7, column 1046, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding society'?
Suggestion: the surrounding society
...d deeper understanding of the world and the society around us. In a nutshell, the process that thi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, similarly, so, then, therefore, thus, well, while, at least, you know, as well as, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.5258426966 149% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 14.8657303371 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 58.6224719101 128% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2967.0 2235.4752809 133% => OK
No of words: 573.0 442.535393258 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1780104712 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89258810929 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96365019025 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 284.0 215.323595506 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495636998255 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 904.5 704.065955056 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 10.0 1.77640449438 563% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.100796419 60.3974514979 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.0 118.986275619 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9130434783 23.4991977007 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.78260869565 5.21951772744 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200285980123 0.243740707755 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0463280430916 0.0831039109588 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0750689312438 0.0758088955206 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138927874103 0.150359130593 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100842952429 0.0667264976115 151% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.1392134831 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 100.480337079 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 11.8971910112 134% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, similarly, so, then, therefore, thus, well, while, at least, you know, as well as, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments