[32] The vice president of human resources at Climpson Industries sent the following
recommendation to the company's president.
"In an effort to improve our employees' productivity, we should implement electronic monitoring
of employees' Internet use from their workstations. Employees who use the Internet from their
workstations need to be identified and punished if we are to reduce the number of work hours
spent on personal or recreational activities, such as shopping or playing games. By installing
software to detect employees' Internet use on company computers, we can prevent
employees from wasting time, foster a better work ethic at Climpson, and improve our overall
profits."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the
argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and
what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The vice president of human resources at Climpson Industries argues that their company should monitor employees' Internet use in work place, so that this company will improve their overall profits. To support his claim, he mentions that monitoring and punishing the one who surfs on Internet to do personal activities will prevent employees from wasting time and improving their productivity. However, this argument is rife with unwarranted assumption, thus, is not compelling at all.
Firstly, monitoring Internet use doesn't preclude wasting time. There are many other things which employee can spend on, such as chatting, drinking, or just daydreaming. The stem of whether employees focus on their jobs is the jobs' meaning, but not the ban of Internet. If the job is meaningful for the worker, even though no one supervises him, him will concentrate on it.
Furthermore, the relation between no wasting time and productivity is fallacious. A company needs many aspects of works to ensure their efficiency. For example, if there is no promise, or working schedule, even every subordinates work hard, the outcome could be adverse.
Finally, the assumption that improving employees' productivity ensures profits is nonsense. An industry is lucrative if it sells its products well. How is the selling depend on many variables including some which the company can’t control, such as the overall economic environment. As a result, productivity won't guarantee profits.
In sum, the reasoning line in this recommendation is rife with hole and fallacious assumptions. Thus, we can claim that to monitor Internet use is unwarranted at all: there is no evidence that this will lead to reduce time-wasting and improve profit.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 34, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ll. Firstly, monitoring Internet use doesnt preclude wasting time. There are many o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, so, thus, well, for example, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 58.6224719101 41% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1460.0 2235.4752809 65% => OK
No of words: 270.0 442.535393258 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40740740741 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.55969084622 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93929435463 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 215.323595506 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.611111111111 0.4932671777 124% => OK
syllable_count: 444.6 704.065955056 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.2998267895 60.3974514979 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.25 118.986275619 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.875 23.4991977007 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5625 5.21951772744 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.32431581836 0.243740707755 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0939563283812 0.0831039109588 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108596587323 0.0758088955206 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159570574327 0.150359130593 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112303004065 0.0667264976115 168% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.8 12.1639044944 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 100.480337079 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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