In this age of intensive media coverage, it is no
longer possible for a society to regard any living man
or woman as a hero.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to
which you agree or disagree with the statement and
explain your reasoning for the position you take. In
developing and supporting your position, you should
consider ways in which the statement might or might
not hold true and explain how these considerations
shape your position.
The speaker asserts that it is no longer probable for a society to consider any living man or woman as a hero in this age of intensive media coverage. In my point of view, this statement is right to some extend but it is too extreme. Media coverage can destroy heroes while it can create heroes as well.
Media can destroy hero’s contribution and reputation in some cases. In light of media’s nature for capturing as much audience as possible, it always discloses celebrities’ surprising misbehavior to catch our eyes. For instance, Bill Clinton, the one who imposed NAFTA which brought considerable profits for America, had been one of the most respectful heroes until he was exposed the scandal of marital indiscretion with Monica Lewinsky. Since then his reputation and prestige fell into a freezing point on account of the deep disappointment from the public. What’s worse, sometimes media may exaggerate the truth or even exposure fake news to attract viewers for the sake of dramatic profits. Michael Jackson can be taken as an example of this condition. As a top icon in his age, the citizens regarded him as hero until he was exposed of bleaching and plastic surgery, which horribly damaged his image and engendered a wide-range boycott to him.
However, media can create heroes as well. It extends definition for hero under certain circumstances where ordinary people can also become heroes. For example, a TV programme named Touching China covers ten CNN heroes who are entirely ordinary people annually. The most impressed one is a teacher named Li Ping who was exposed by the programme in 2015 for her selflessness. She saved her ten students’ lives by pushing away them when facing an overspeed car. Unfortunately, she lost her legs for a lifelong time. Without the coverage of media, her heroic exploit is unlikely to be widely known by the mass. Tu Youyou, the one who discovered artemisinin to treat malaria after years of assiduous research, was also reported by the media for that she became the laureate of the Nobel Prize in the field of physiology in 2015, which made her become a well-known hero.
In conclusion, it is true that media can destroy heroes in some ways, but the statement is too extreme since it overlooks the fact that media exposure can also create heroes. In other words, the heroes do exist despite such intensive media coverage.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 205, Rule ID: SOME_EXTEND[1]
Message: Did you mean 'extent' ("extent" is a noun, "extend" is a verb)?
Suggestion: extent
...f view, this statement is right to some extend but it is too extreme. Media coverage c...
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Line 9, column 844, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ld of physiology in 2015, which made her become a well-known hero. In conclu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, so, then, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in other words, in some cases, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2008.0 2235.4752809 90% => OK
No of words: 402.0 442.535393258 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99502487562 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78455449205 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574626865672 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 645.3 704.065955056 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.9186041642 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.4 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05 5.21951772744 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26476280004 0.243740707755 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0809028412982 0.0831039109588 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.08317520552 0.0758088955206 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180126373867 0.150359130593 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0785492075172 0.0667264976115 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 100.480337079 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.