In this age of intensive media coverage, it is no longer possible for a society to regard any living man or woman as a hero.
We are living in an age of technology and advancements in technology has made the lives of those worthy of the title hero, more easily accessible to the public. The lives of our superstars are continuously under the radar and observation of the paparazzi. They continuously monitor the stars and look to bring out the personal lives of the celebrities to the public. By doing so, a lot of sensitive information comes to the surface and as a result people loose their interests and beliefs in their heroes. So, it has become increasingly difficult at present to consider someone as a hero.
To begin, a good public image is very important to have the title of a hero. People consider humanitarians, favorite athletes, movie stars , scientists, teachers and people of many other professions as their heroes. The media tend to always follow the famous people around and cover every aspect of their lives. They may be recorded eating at a resturant or shopping or even going for a walk. So, the media know no personal boundaries and since no one is perfect, it is very easy for their flaws to come to light. And with the creation of various social networking platforms such as Youtube, Facebook, Twitter, Instagram etc. people get more access to the daily lives of their heroes and hence can easily come to observe any flaws of the stars. For instance, Justin Beiber, the famous pop singer, was considered as an idol by millions of followers. But when Justin was found by the media to be taking recreational drugs, the opinions of the public changed in an instant. They began abhoring someone that they so dearly followed.
Furthermore, no one is perfect and everyone tends to have some flaws. These problems may be very minor but when people see their idols having such minor troubles, they have a tendency to overreact. Some celebrities are very careful to hide their problems while others not so much. As a result, something unwanted is bound to come out.
In conclusion, it is theoretically possible that some of our celebrities might be able to maintain their status as heroes but practically it is very difficult in the modern age of mass media dominance. The stars need to be very careful about what they are doing in public and keep in mind that they are followed by millions of people around the globe.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 456, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
...s to the surface and as a result people loose their interests and beliefs in their he...
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Line 3, column 139, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...itarians, favorite athletes, movie stars , scientists, teachers and people of many...
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Line 3, column 627, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: People
...tube, Facebook, Twitter, Instagram etc. people get more access to the daily lives of t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, hence, if, look, may, so, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1917.0 2235.4752809 86% => OK
No of words: 401.0 442.535393258 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78054862843 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65631693384 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506234413965 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 614.7 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.3929031922 60.3974514979 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 91.2857142857 118.986275619 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0952380952 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7619047619 5.21951772744 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136079651745 0.243740707755 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0405890282507 0.0831039109588 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.043645739417 0.0758088955206 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0829994025859 0.150359130593 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0412254484371 0.0667264976115 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 14.1392134831 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 100.480337079 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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