In this age of intensive media coverage, it is no longer possible for a society to regard any living man or woman as a hero. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The speaker asserts that it is no longer possible for a society to regard anyone as a hero because of media. Although media report many scandals, which cause a negative effect on society, in some area, there are many hero created by media. In my view, since social media make our know someone’s achievement in the world, in the society, and in the political area, there are more heroes resulted in media’s report; So I strongly disagree with the speaker.
To begin with, in the realm of technology social media create more heroes. If someone’s achievement is covered, none can know who is contributed to the world. Media make people getting information and knowing who has contributed to the world. Scientist’s achievement helps enhance general welfare. With technological progressing, social development is escalating. For example, Bill Gates’ achievement couldn’t be known if there are no media, which disperse the news. With media spreading the news, Bill Gates become people’s hero. In a word, media make people seeing more others’ achievement but not hide them.
Second, social media cause more social hero. With media reporting, people remove the misunderstanding of social division and then find more social heroes; people can know who is devoting themselves to country, even sacrificing themselves, such as policeman, prosecutor, and fireman. For instance, in many places, even though burning fire would kill fireman probably, they do their best to help fire victims without any return. As a result, many fireman dies saving victims from fire. If it is not reported by media, fireman’s sacrifice will be ignored. In sum, social media make people know what is doing by the heroes.
Finally, media result in more political heroes. If something that is helpful for society but there is no report by media, people is incapable of knowing what they do. As media disperse the news, public can know what is doing by someone. Obama, the 44th president of the United States, improve the country. In his presidency, he solved the global financial crisis, included stimulus package, including legislation to form health care, and the end of a major US military presence in Iraq. Without media report, public was unable to know what he did. In brief, social media create more heroes in political area.
To sum up, without media, public couldn’t know who is contributed to the world. Through media’s uncover, it make more heroes known; Thus, I totally disagree with what the speaker says.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 213, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun hero seems to be countable; consider using: 'many heroes', 'many heros'.
Suggestion: many heroes; many heros
...ect on society, in some area, there are many hero created by media. In my view, since soc...
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Line 1, column 218, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'heroes', 'heros'?
Suggestion: heroes; heros
...n society, in some area, there are many hero created by media. In my view, since soc...
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Line 5, column 441, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun fireman seems to be countable; consider using: 'many firemen'.
Suggestion: many firemen
...ictims without any return. As a result, many fireman dies saving victims from fire. If it is...
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Line 9, column 109, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'makes'?
Suggestion: makes
... the world. Through media’s uncover, it make more heroes known; Thus, I totally disa...
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Line 9, column 119, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'heroes'' or 'hero's'?
Suggestion: heroes'; hero's
.... Through media’s uncover, it make more heroes known; Thus, I totally disagree with wh...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, second, so, then, thus, for example, for instance, in brief, such as, as a result, in my view, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2112.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 408.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17647058824 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67470583923 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512254901961 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 654.3 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 4.38483146067 411% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.2757606914 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.2307692308 118.986275619 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6923076923 23.4991977007 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26923076923 5.21951772744 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1632917607 0.243740707755 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0562749400495 0.0831039109588 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0598091460942 0.0758088955206 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112383346064 0.150359130593 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0525166744401 0.0667264976115 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.1392134831 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.8420337079 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 100.480337079 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.