All parents should be required to volunteer time to their children's schools.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
There is a widespread opinion that all parents should be obliged to volunteer in their children's schools. I can only partly agree with this statement, and in that, response I want to critically discuss it.
Inevitably, there are few points that make me support this claim. I consider education to be a multi-dimensional phenomenon where many actors are involved. I believe that collaborative educational practices are highly important in children’s development. It means that not only school staff from one side and children on the other are the part of the process. Parents here can perform as mediators that can influence the education settings. From that idea I derive that parents should necessarily participate in the school life, and should be required to volunteer in order to structure their school activity and implement the most effective allocation of parental human resource. That step will maximize the probability that the parents will indeed collaborate in school education of their children.
Yet, I do account for the fact that ideal role of parents in their children’s school education cannot be fully performed in reality. And for that reason, any legal obligations may be problematic and can even contributed bad to the educational process. Ideally, there should be a trialogue between children, school staff and parents where all the actors are interested in contribution to the quality of education. So, instead of obligating parents to volunteer in schools, it is important to develop a special culture based on consciousness and not strict requirements. Yet, this position can be also challenge with the claim that it is plausible to introduce some temporal requirements to create that sort of cultural, as it is with gender quotas in many professional spheres.
After, that I want to have a more precise look at the formulation of that claim. Here I have another two concerns. The first one is related to the phrase “all parents” meaning that the requirement has no exceptions. At the same time, some group of people may be excluded from this obligation. For instance, certain parents are not capable to hold additional obligation above their work or parental obligation due to the specifics of their professional activity or health. Another question is in the necessity of such requirement for the parents that work in school, and have a direct and observable contribution to the development of education. The second concern is related to the mutual correspondence of the terms “requirement” and “volunteer”. The latter word comes from Latin, and in many languages the words of the same root (for example, volonté in French) has substantive implication of free will. Thus, volunteering can be defined as an activity that requires person’s free will and therefore cannot be a requirement in itself, as it creates an oxymoron.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...that the parents will indeed collaborate in school education of their children. ...
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Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'contribute'
Suggestion: contribute
...gations may be problematic and can even contributed bad to the educational process. Ideally...
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...quotas in many professional spheres. After, that I want to have a more precise loo...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...spondence of the terms “requirement” and “volunteer”. The latter word comes from ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, second, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, sort of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.3162921348 186% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2424.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 461.0 442.535393258 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25813449024 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11867222996 2.79657885939 112% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501084598698 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 756.0 704.065955056 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.4035484781 60.3974514979 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.391304348 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0434782609 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.17391304348 5.21951772744 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.318449322907 0.243740707755 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0887818401831 0.0831039109588 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.064368696964 0.0758088955206 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219449667235 0.150359130593 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0315842377551 0.0667264976115 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 100.480337079 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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