In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Evolution is a part of every human endeavor, so is the case with any fields of endeavor. Every field evolves with passing time. New technologies or new developments make past achievements either redundant or just another stepping stone enabling the former.
But that does not mean past achievements are to be ignored. A new contribution might have been inspired by a past achievement. Past achievements are like milestones or indicators which act as catalysts towards achieving even better things. People learn a lot from past achievements: good and bad, pros and cons. For example, had internet not been invented in the 1990s we would not be having social media platforms like Facebook, Twitter, etc. IN this particular case, internet acted as an enabler for better technologies and ideas to take shape utilizing the former’s inherent power. But internet still exists. On the other hand, landline telephones are almost obsolete today giving way to mobile phones. Had there been no landline telephones, would we be enjoying the benefits of mobile phones? This example shows that though a past achievement is not in vogue anymore that very achievement laid a foundation to achieve something better.
In contrast, some past achievements might not be so useful in our current contributions. There may be some gray areas left in those achievements which need new approaches and new inspirations. Utilization of coal to generate electricity, though happening even today, is a very outdated idea in this modern world; because, the world is trying to move towards greener alternatives. In such a scenario, research in developing alternative models would be helpful.
So to sum up past achievements can be helpful in inspiring and learning from past mistakes alike towards better endeavors.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, may, so, still, as to, for example, in contrast, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 33.0505617978 30% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 58.6224719101 67% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1506.0 2235.4752809 67% => OK
No of words: 285.0 442.535393258 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28421052632 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.55969084622 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00832946468 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.628070175439 0.4932671777 127% => OK
syllable_count: 475.2 704.065955056 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.0032049965 60.3974514979 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.6666666667 118.986275619 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8333333333 23.4991977007 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55555555556 5.21951772744 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196599537319 0.243740707755 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0640258476195 0.0831039109588 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0523099774927 0.0758088955206 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123642563064 0.150359130593 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0417216202144 0.0667264976115 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 48.8420337079 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 100.480337079 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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