In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.
The statement links the significant achievements with past experiences. As the great scientist, Isaac Newton, once put: “If I have seen further, it is by standing on the shoulder of the giant.” The metaphor means that it is easier to discover base on the previous discoveries. But it seems that this concept can not be applied universally on different fields such as art field.
In the scientific field, most of the innovation come from the past experiences. Base on the established theory, scientists are able to pose new hypothesis from the existing knowledge and, by conducting the experiment, we can either prove the hypothesis or reject it and ultimately increase our bank of experience. The process is slow but firm. Over time, by accumulating the experiences little by little, surely some important breakthroughs will happen. Almost all of the scientists are following this path.
However, the procedure seems different in the fields other than science. Fields such as the arts, there are myriad examples show that unprecedented achievements can be realized without experience basement. The evaluation of the art field may not be the same as in the science, it is decided by its audiences. For example, in 18 century, lots of musicians implemented new techniques, used various kinds of instruments or based on innovative tempo theory in order to create brand new music atmosphere for the audience. However, only a few of them succeed. On the other hand, one of the greatest musician, Beethoven, actually didn’t make any innovative approach, but exploited the existent techniques and pushed it to the limit. In the arts field, as a kind of entertainment, the primary issue is to entertain the audiences.
To sum up, it is important for science field to make a significant contribution on the basis of previous achievement, while for art field it is not. Because the evaluations for each of them are on different standards. For the science that is decided by how much innovative it is, but for the art that depends on the audiences. Thus there are more chances for scientists to make contributions by following their predecessor, but that is generally not the case in terms of the arts.
- A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. 66
- Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation’s cultural traditions are preserved and generated 50
- Some people believe that government funding of the arts is necessary to ensure that the arts can flourish and be available to all people. Others believe that government funding of the arts threatens the integrity of the arts. 58
- Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free 50
- Peoples behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making 58
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 55, Rule ID: PAST_EXPERIENCE_MEMORY
Message: Use simply 'experiences'.
...links the significant achievements with past experiences. As the great scientist, Isaac Newton, ...
Line 3, column 63, Rule ID: PAST_EXPERIENCE_MEMORY
Message: Use simply 'experiences'.
...d, most of the innovation come from the past experiences. Base on the established theory, scient...
Line 3, column 462, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...rtant breakthroughs will happen. Almost all of the scientists are following this path. ...
Line 5, column 329, Rule ID: CD_NN
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'century' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'centuries'.
...ed by its audiences. For example, in 18 century, lots of musicians implemented new tech...
Line 7, column 328, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
... the art that depends on the audiences. Thus there are more chances for scientists t...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, however, if, may, so, thus, while, for example, kind of, such as, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1852.0 2235.4752809 83% => OK
No of words: 364.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08791208791 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06831606236 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 215.323595506 92% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543956043956 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 704.065955056 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.211049774 60.3974514979 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.4736842105 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1578947368 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.73684210526 5.21951772744 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235013225774 0.243740707755 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0709238107171 0.0831039109588 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0775375630624 0.0758088955206 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133421217955 0.150359130593 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0516589501043 0.0667264976115 77% => OK
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 100.480337079 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.