Government should offer a free university education to any student who has been admitted to a university but who cannot afford the tuition.
Education is a hundred years national strategy. People become discernible and judicious to know to make better decisions, and in turn, the nation makes a better strategy. Knowledge energizes the public and the educated diversifies the vocations, and thus, the nation becomes vigorous and cultural. More people get educated and the nation gets stronger. It is such a beneficial and harmless business and of course, we should offer as much opportunity as possible to push more people to get educated.
Some people may argue that it is unfair to those who pay tuition for themselves. Not all of the people believe in altruism. But by that standard, it is also “fair” to argue that because they are born from poor and uneducated families, that is generally unreasonable since they don’t have an equal amount of resources to compete with the rich. If this nation is incapable of offering more opportunities to those students, the poor will stay in poor with high chances and the rich will become richer. This is real injustice.
For the government, they should take the development of the country as a whole. On this basis, to push poor but admitted students get into university for free is a long term business. By investing in these students, the country not only can cause detrimental destruction of poverty and flatten the social hierarchy between rich and poor, but also increase total productivity from those students. For example, in Taiwan, Yung Ching Wan, a poor student from peasant family, who got scholarship for university, after graduated, he became an industrial titan and brought countless profit for the country, and created numerous job opportunity. Compare to his success, the money invested in him was not worth mentioning.
Altruism is also a key issue here. By helping these students to get into university, we show our society a better vision of compassion and cooperation. The rich and the poor will have chances to talk to know about the blind spot of the quandary of society and may lead to some solutions for the real problems. Our society will become better and cultivate more leaders if more people hold attitudes of compassion and cooperation to each other, rather than competitiveness. As a leader, undeniable, he or she may be better equipped with both qualities. A leader needs to communicate and organize effectively with others in enterprise, but to compete aggressively with other enterprises. However, competitiveness is an inherent quality of human nature and doesn’t require much time to learn, but cooperation is not. Cooperation requires humanity of people to take care of each other. Therefore, if students are going to be leaders someday, it is important for them to learn to show compassionate. By introducing the poor, it is positive for everyone to learn how to be better leaders.
To sum up, a government should offer free university education to students who are not affordable but have been admitted. It is righteous for our society to give every students equality opportunities to run for their dreams. From government point of view, to improve the country as a whole, investing this student is economical, because the act not only decrease the poverty but also they will become lucrative if tax is concerned. Lastly, The act bridges the gap between the rich and the poor, making them to communicate with each other, and this might open a chance to solve the problems in our society, for they become more cooperative and complementary and better leaders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 86, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ose who pay tuition for themselves. Not all of the people believe in altruism. But by that...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, lastly, may, so, therefore, thus, for example, of course, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 33.0 14.8657303371 222% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2961.0 2235.4752809 132% => OK
No of words: 581.0 442.535393258 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09638554217 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90957651803 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92194820617 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 281.0 215.323595506 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483648881239 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 941.4 704.065955056 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 1.0 0.740449438202 135% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.77640449438 450% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.080306196 60.3974514979 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.103448276 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0344827586 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.13793103448 5.21951772744 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155414544075 0.243740707755 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0459656620968 0.0831039109588 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108483224326 0.0758088955206 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0938135359709 0.150359130593 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0733253244488 0.0667264976115 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.1392134831 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 100.480337079 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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