In any field of inquiry, the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important contributions.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Change in virtually every society around the world is occurring at almost lightning speed, for, people do not hesitate to look forward no matter what. As one of the major components of this fact, which is also mentioned in the prompt, contributions, are mainly coming from the ones who are experts in the relevant field. In this sense, I mostly disagree with the statement in the light of the matters mentioned below.
Firstly, experience is the collective knowledge that people utilize as a legacy remained from the past. It is like a lighthouse guiding the scientists, artists or people who are professionally in search for something that human beings are in need of. In this vein, it is unfair to give the credit to the newcomers. For example, Newton made thousands of experiments just to find the bulb. If he did not have the necessary information from his previous experiments, should not we wait for a couple of more years to have that luxury? Most probably people would have been continued using candles for a long time. Thus, the importance of experience should not be sidelined when it comes to inquiring.
Secondly, beginners frequently need direction, since they are not usually familiar with the process and decision taking steps. Thus, they should first learn to listen and get familiar with the working culture of the environment, otherwise they may be ridiculed. This is why all firms have an education department in their human resources section. This way, they educate young and rookies and get them familiar with the company and the people working there.
However, it is also a fact that, there is always a need for an outsider to see what is going on to break vicious circles and become more productive. For instance during 1990s, in my country Turkey, there was a devastating economical bottleneck which then government was paralyzed and helpless to overcome. What was did in the end was to bring technocrats, who were significantly lacking necessary political skills, to key positions in the government. They were professionals in their fields. Some were businessmen, some were scientists, and some were economists. In spite of the fact that they could not grasp the urge in ordinary people to bring necessary items back their home, they were quite clever in understanding the factual situation in general economy. At first, their policies were scolded harshly since they were not taking the situation of society into consideration, they were successful in controlling the economy in the long run. And in the end everybody thanked them.
To conclude, the prompt seems to be too lame when it comes to presenting the importance of experience. Thus, while, I mostly disagree with the statement, I believe that an outsider’s opinion sometimes can matter a lot.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 283, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...utions, are mainly coming from the ones who are experts in the relevant field. In this ...
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Line 7, column 163, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'during the 1990s'.
Suggestion: during the 1990s
...nd become more productive. For instance during 1990s, in my country Turkey, there was a deva...
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Line 7, column 316, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'done'.
Suggestion: done
...yzed and helpless to overcome. What was did in the end was to bring technocrats, wh...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, while, as to, for example, for instance, in general, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.5258426966 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2332.0 2235.4752809 104% => OK
No of words: 462.0 442.535393258 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04761904762 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79840916773 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547619047619 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 720.9 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.5202566105 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.1666666667 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.25 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.20833333333 5.21951772744 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.106298417302 0.243740707755 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0287702539247 0.0831039109588 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0267020835811 0.0758088955206 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0619562468546 0.150359130593 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0205706387727 0.0667264976115 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.1392134831 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 100.480337079 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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