As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Technology has been the vital facet of the development process of human-beings. Hence, it has always been a hotly debated matter when it comes to its effects on people and their lives. In this sense, I have to iterate that I mostly disagree with the above mentioned statement since it oversimplifies the realities of life, while I agree it comes with some downsides.
Firstly, technology is so vital that it is embedded to the lives of people. It is inseparable from people’s daily routines. Everything from a to z is working with a circuit attached to a connection point, a point where actually our lives are integrated. We cannot even wake up without the help of a “technological” device. If all these are considered it can be seen that it is far from making people lazy. Let’s think about the number of cables inside a basic laptop computer. How can a lazy creature succeed in placing those thin, thread-like wires in two pieces of plastic? Apparently, people must have the logical capacity and resilient to build that and put to the service of people. Blaming technology for lethargy of people would be very unwise.
Secondly, technology has always been a matter of mystery, and people have exerted a lot of effort to be able uncover that unknown. It is not a solved issue. It did not happen overnight. The effort is so tremendous that no one can count the hours spent on to be able to create a piece of technology. While people are working hard on that matter it would be unfair to say that people are losing track of their lives. All these efforts are for the ultimate aim of living a prosperous and fruitful life that will represent the power of a living species that changed the world. For example, people are looking for the ways to establish energy producing systems that are to the dire need of people. Because energy is the source of every possible move and the more the sources the more capable of movement. And, the more people move the more they learn and the more they create. All of which for what? For the wellbeing of people and the environment surrounding them.
On the other hand, while it is true that technology is aiming a better life for people, one should not forget that there is always a problem which is also prevalent in our social lives, which is, free riding. While some people are doing their best to create something some others will always try to benefit from their efforts with no cost. No one can deny the fact that this is a burden on everyone. For example, a company like ETS, which is investing tons of money and creating an idea or object, is capable of producing very valuable books for the usage of students, but some other people who have the ability reach necessary technology, try to reproduce these books illegally and sell it for a price. This is a serious externality that should be dealt very intricately.
In conclusion, it can be resolutely stated that, technology is the biggest invention of people aiming to make the lives of people better and fruitful while having some drawbacks to be handled.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...t the help of a “technological” device. If all these are considered it can be seen...
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...e able to create a piece of technology. While people are working hard on that matter ...
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...ur social lives, which is, free riding. While some people are doing their best to cre...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, apparently, but, first, firstly, hence, if, look, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 37.0 19.5258426966 189% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.3162921348 203% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 51.0 33.0505617978 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2529.0 2235.4752809 113% => OK
No of words: 541.0 442.535393258 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67467652495 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82280071112 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58742141403 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 215.323595506 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484288354898 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 816.3 704.065955056 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 59.5234543447 60.3974514979 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.2068965517 118.986275619 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6551724138 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.44827586207 5.21951772744 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23713664975 0.243740707755 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0602110783343 0.0831039109588 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0486864392396 0.0758088955206 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12334840002 0.150359130593 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0556375776025 0.0667264976115 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 14.1392134831 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 12.1639044944 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 100.480337079 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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