"Over the past year, the Crust Copper Company (CCC) has purchased over 10,000 square miles of land in the tropical nation of West Fredonia. Mining copper on this land will inevitably result in pollution and, since West Fredonia is the home of several endangered animal species, in environmental disaster. But such disasters can be prevented if consumers simply refuse to purchase products that are made with CCC's copper unless the company abandons its mining plans."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The memo proposes to boycott the products of Crust Copper Company (CCC) in order for them to abandon its mining plan on West Fredonia. The author of the writing a proposes a valid argument, one that would be true if its premises were reliable. However, his or her conclusion relies on assumptions for which there is no clear evidence.
Firstly, does requiring new lands always mean building new mining areas? Maybe CCC is buying these lands to make investment for its workers. Maybe they are building recreation areas or more importantly housing facilities for its mine workers to show the world that the management of CCC is caring about their workers. In addition, with this kind of an immense invest in West Fredonia, many tourists will choose her over other near tourists destinations. Maybe, this new facilities will be a harbor for endangered animals, and give them the opportunity to reproduce more without any outside effect. If one of these examples turns out to be true, the logic of the argument falls apart.
Secondly, the author assumes that mining activities of CCC will directly and negatively affect the nature of West Fredonia. This is a harsh inference to make under these circumstances. The world has changed a lot and the technology used by big industries is more cleaner, efficient and friendlier anymore. Did the author make any investigation about the recent technological developments in the mining industry? How can a copper mine be so deleterious that it will cause extinction of some species? Many governments are applying strict rules and high penalties to environmentally effective industries, so companies are very careful when establishing new compounds and business areas. Thus, it is rather inappropriate to assume that activities of CCC are going to be harmful for the nature.
Lastly, the writer, when promoting a boycott, assumes that, people will exactly know which products include the copper materials produced by CCC, let alone which products include copper. In this type of world, this is rather awkward to assume that people are so knowledgeable. How can an ordinary person know what kind of products are composed of copper? How would they know if there is no logo of CCC? Maybe CCC is not putting any logos to the products shipped to the third party sellers for budgetary reasons. Perhaps there are some materials made of copper in our smartphones, but they may all be embedded in some hard-to-reach-part of the phones. Then how would people know who produced that specific copper-made-item? As seen, the argument author makes does not hold water.
Overall, the writer of the memo leaves too many questions unanswered, and, hence loses credibility. Therefore, argument made in the memo is less likely significantly to persuade the consumers not to choose CCC's copper made products.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 465 350
No. of Characters: 2305 1500
No. of Different Words: 239 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.644 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.957 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.721 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 162 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 119 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 86 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.885 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.48 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.692 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.259 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.46 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.061 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 226, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...more importantly housing facilities for its mine workers to show the world that the...
^^^
Line 4, column 342, Rule ID: KIND_OF_A[1]
Message: Don't include 'an' after a classification term. Use simply 'kind of'.
Suggestion: kind of
...t their workers. In addition, with this kind of an immense invest in West Fredonia, many t...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 259, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'cleaner' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: cleaner
...he technology used by big industries is more cleaner, efficient and friendlier anymore. Did ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thus, in addition, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2373.0 2260.96107784 105% => OK
No of words: 464.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11422413793 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86715944141 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 204.123752495 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538793103448 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 737.1 705.55239521 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.6156402382 57.8364921388 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.2692307692 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8461538462 23.324526521 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.84615384615 5.70786347227 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212356713776 0.218282227539 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0532290533995 0.0743258471296 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0581354360995 0.0701772020484 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109370636538 0.128457276422 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0432832469298 0.0628817314937 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 98.500998004 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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