The best way for a society to prepare its young people fore leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
What is the best way for a society to prepare its youth for the real world, through teaching them cooperation or competition? On one hand, obtaining good jobs and moving up in a company may require competition when there is a lot of interest in those positions. On the other hand, practically all fields and jobs require people to cooperate and work in collaboration with others. When looking at the evidence, it becomes clear that it is more important to teach children cooperation than competition as cooperation is essential in the complex world welive in, and because although being competitive has it's place, it is ultimately cooperation that will be essential for greater success in a wide variety of career paths.
Some may state that it is more important to teach children to be competitive because that is how they will be able to get jobs that are indeed competitive. Consider for example becoming a politition. In order to become a politition you must have the drive to compete against many other candidates and convice the voters why you are the best choice. This competitiveness may help them to continue and push forward in their careers even if they fail the first time and it may give them the drive necessary to put in long hours and work hard in order to gain an advantage over their competitors. However, it is absolutely essential in politics to cooperate and work with individuals in other political parties for example. Therefore, it is actually the candidates who are able to effectively cooperate with others who are more likely to accomplish more. When polititions are incapable of cooperation, issues arrise such as the 2018 governmental shutdown, which occured when the democratic and republican representatives were unable to cooperate with each other to find an acceptable solution to their disagreements conserning the national budget. This illustrates that while competition may be helpful in giving someone the drive to fight for a position, cooperation is even more important because it will be essential for their success in that position.
Additionally, many fields and industries are extremely interdiciplinary and require colaboration with many different kinds of people in order to succeed. Therefore, it will be the individuals who are most able to cooperate who will have an advantage as they will be able to benefit more from the skills that others offer. Consider for example two groups of environmental scientists who would like to publish work describing actions one should take against climate change. One group may be competative and want their puplication to reach the public first. This competitiveness may give them the drive to work hard and quickly, but they may not cooperate with other scientific groups and therefore their knowledge and their publication will likely be more limited in scope and practicality. Meanwhile the other group could cooperate with other scientific groups or groups in other fields from business to politics by sharing their research colaboratively. Through this mutual spreadinig of knowledge, their publication could be significantly amelliorated compared to the first competitive group. Therefore, coopertation is also important for the spreading of knowledge and the achievement of bigger more complex goals, such as those presented by climate change.
In conclusion, competition may be important as a driving force to work hard and to push into a field. However, cooperation is significantly more important as it is practically impossible to work in this day and age without cooperating with others. Those in politics must be able to cooperate with others in order to acheive anything, and those in other fields such as research can greatly benefit their scope of research through cooperation with other scientific groups. Therefore, as we move forward, it will be essential to teach our young people the importance of cooperation in whatever career they choose so that they can be properly prepared to work in the complex word we live in.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 10, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'states'.
Suggestion: states
...e variety of career paths. Some may state that it is more important to teach chil...
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Line 3, column 609, Rule ID: ABSOLUTELY_ESSENTIAL[1]
Message: Use simply 'essential'.
Suggestion: essential
... over their competitors. However, it is absolutely essential in politics to cooperate and work with ...
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Line 5, column 103, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...ciplinary and require colaboration with many different kinds of people in order to succeed. Th...
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Line 5, column 790, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Meanwhile,
...more limited in scope and practicality. Meanwhile the other group could cooperate with ot...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, look, may, so, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 36.0 19.5258426966 184% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 12.4196629213 201% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 33.0505617978 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 95.0 58.6224719101 162% => OK
Nominalization: 28.0 12.9106741573 217% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3384.0 2235.4752809 151% => OK
No of words: 651.0 442.535393258 147% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19815668203 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.05120793913 4.55969084622 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02896541575 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 215.323595506 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.423963133641 0.4932671777 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1082.7 704.065955056 154% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.6490391567 60.3974514979 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.0 118.986275619 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.125 23.4991977007 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.21951772744 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 10.2758426966 204% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123406974625 0.243740707755 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0440451457393 0.0831039109588 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0470915720047 0.0758088955206 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0867730790746 0.150359130593 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0281725623362 0.0667264976115 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 14.1392134831 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 48.8420337079 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 100.480337079 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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