The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competition Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree wi

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

It is certainly true that cooperation is the key value that needs to be incorporated among young people of society who will in turn take leadership positions in the future. Though some people might argue that having the quality of competition is equally important, I tend to disagree with this opinion. In my view. cooperation is way more vital than competition as a foundation of leadership.

There is a very famous proverb that states, 'With great power comes great responsibilities'. Thus, it becomes very important for the person who is in position of the leader to be very responsible towards people working under him or her. It can be illustrated using the case of two government official of small towns. One of the town has recently employed a new strategy of farming to increase there paddy crops. They are very sanguine about it's output. But they have recently faced a very bad drought because of which the water supply is not adequate. In order to make their plan work they need the cooperation from the second town which has ample water sources. The official from second town should also be considerate and help them as per their situation. This will inculcate a good bond between them and this newly developed relation can help in the growth of their people.

Secondly, I believe there are always two sides of leadership. One is the leader and other is the people under them. Thus, a leader should be cooperative while working with people as cooperation is a people's quality. The moment you take the in charge of any government or any industry for that matter, all your decisions are never just yours. For instance, a factory runs with the people, if the leader has good impression on them then that can yield them success while if the leader is not cooperative and someone who considers everyone's point of view while coming on a decision then the same can be a good reason for the factory's decline.

In conclusion, I believe that competition can be one part of the making of a leader but not the whole. In sports as well a leader should be competitive with the rival team but at the same time a bigger responsibility is to be cooperative and considerate within your own team. Thus, young people should inculcate cooperation and team building skills to become a better leader tomorrow.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 316, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Cooperation
...disagree with this opinion. In my view. cooperation is way more vital than competition as a...
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Line 3, column 291, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'official' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'officials'.
Suggestion: officials
...trated using the case of two government official of small towns. One of the town has rec...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1905.0 2235.4752809 85% => OK
No of words: 400.0 442.535393258 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7625 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67131872864 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 603.0 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 56.8930651457 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.7142857143 118.986275619 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0476190476 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.80952380952 5.21951772744 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218289922515 0.243740707755 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0604477455544 0.0831039109588 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.04298808009 0.0758088955206 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130598868439 0.150359130593 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0462228934578 0.0667264976115 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.1392134831 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 100.480337079 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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