The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Preparing the youth for leadership is crucial to the success of any body, organization, company or country. Some people are skewed towards preparing the youth through inculcating them of the importance of cooperation. While others favor grooming through use of competition. I believe competition is more efficient in preparing the youth than cooperation.
The rate of growth of technological advancement in the last four decades as been nothing short of astonishing. The competition for relevance in a global world filled with so many technological prodcuts and services as made innovation at the core of how society operates. For example, for the Swiss to remain relevant in the chocolate industry, they have to continually innovate to ensure they keep the market share of the industry. Otherwise, the world would move to other countries providing more value at less cost. As seen in the shift of global oil demand from Africa to Eastern Asia.
Further, competition among various people or groups drastically drives up the amount of refinement supplied. A university student of literature applying to an international poem competition would deliver a much better work than if the said student was to work in a group to deliver a similar assignment for a peer review.
While cooperation brings about harmonious relationship and could act as a agent of change. There would have to be set standards to "compete" with or achieve. So even when people cooperate, they are acting as a single entity competing with others or a standard they set to achieve.
In conclusion, competition leads to growth more readily than cooperation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'anybody'?
Suggestion: anybody
...leadership is crucial to the success of any body, organization, company or country. Some...
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Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... them of the importance of cooperation. While others favor grooming through use of co...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ensure they keep the market share of the industry. Otherwise, the world would mov...
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Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ries providing more value at less cost. As seen in the shift of global oil demand ...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...armonious relationship and could act as a agent of change. There would have to b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, while, as to, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.5258426966 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 11.3162921348 9% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 6.0 33.0505617978 18% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1385.0 2235.4752809 62% => OK
No of words: 262.0 442.535393258 59% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28625954198 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.55969084622 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15968989471 2.79657885939 113% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 215.323595506 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.595419847328 0.4932671777 121% => OK
syllable_count: 437.4 704.065955056 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.4692475838 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.3333333333 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4666666667 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.2 5.21951772744 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149979935328 0.243740707755 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0452383013063 0.0831039109588 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0328864333481 0.0758088955206 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0709701282638 0.150359130593 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0376776634614 0.0667264976115 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 100.480337079 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.