The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government , industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
There is a general discussion in the society regarding the nuances of co-operation and competition, and which one of them is better for the younger generation and thus, to the public in general. The prompt has stated that it is better for the society to allow youth to lead themselves, by instilling co-operation rather competition. However, I do not agree with this statement. I think that society has become more competitive than ever and the pragmatic way for growth is to compete and flourish.
Right from kindergarten to school, from school to colleges and from colleges to job and beyond, we have always faced competition in one form or the other. While taking our school exams we faced competition from our fellow classmates and friends. Later, when we took our SATs we faced competition from thousands of persons from all over the globe. And finally, after all this struggle we still face competition to secure a job at our beloved dream company. The heavy structures of interview, group discussion, essays are ways to compete and secure a postion. And even so the struggle continues! There may be promotion race, transfer games, best employee batlles and so on. Thus competition is an inherent part of every human being's life. Limited resources and myraid desires are the main cause of this competition, with everyone aiming to get the best meat. In such "Age of Competition", it is difficult to ensure that co-operation will meet our ends. One can be easily tricked and just one broken link can cause the glue of trust to melt and co-operation chain to collapse.
Leaving the academic and career prospects aside, one needs to compete even in their personal life to get the things once desired. Animals compete amongst them to get the best partner. Male lions compete with other males to secure their territory. This is essential for their survival. On the contrary humans have to compete for not only survival but every aspect of their life. Humans have an emotional aspect where they need to compete. For example in a middle-class family of 4 children, the children might have to compete to get funds for their schools, attention of their mother or even, in some cases to get enough food for survival.
There are few positions of leadership and large number of candidates. How can one expect to co-operate when the competition is humongous. UPSC, a statutory body in India, conducts exams for civil services at federal level. The acceptance rate of this exam is mere 0.001%. around 10 lakh students apply to this exam. How can someone co-operate when he knows that the person sitting next to him can topple him out of the race. Many opportunities are available but only those who are competent enough and understand the battles can become like Napoleon The Great and conquer the world.
This does not mean that co-operation is not at all required. Co-operation between experts of various domains resulted in the first journey to the moon. Astrophysicist, chemist, astronauts, material engineers, bureaucrats, politicians, and even common man, all collaborated into this amazing journey. But, even there every person was competing with other to get the best results. Thus competition is not in itself an evil but more of necessity to achieve a better and prosperous future. We must instill the competitive attitude in young generation to make better leaders of tomorrow.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 216, Rule ID: FELLOW_CLASSMATE[1]
Message: Use simply 'classmates'.
Suggestion: classmates
...ool exams we faced competition from our fellow classmates and friends. Later, when we took our SA...
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Line 3, column 638, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: ', the best'.
Suggestion: , the best
...re may be promotion race, transfer games, best employee batlles and so on. Thus compet...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...games, best employee batlles and so on. Thus competition is an inherent part of ever...
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Line 3, column 725, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'beings'' or 'being's'?
Suggestion: beings'; being's
...tion is an inherent part of every human beings life. Limited resources and myraid desi...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Around
...tance rate of this exam is mere 0.001%. around 10 lakh students apply to this exam. Ho...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ot at all required. Co-operation between experts of various domains resulted in t...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ing with other to get the best results. Thus competition is not in itself an evil bu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, regarding, so, still, thus, while, after all, even so, for example, i think, in general, in some cases, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 14.8657303371 175% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 58.6224719101 140% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 12.9106741573 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2851.0 2235.4752809 128% => OK
No of words: 566.0 442.535393258 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0371024735 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87757670434 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77891381609 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 302.0 215.323595506 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533568904594 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 890.1 704.065955056 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 20.2370786517 168% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.3097436425 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.8529411765 118.986275619 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6470588235 23.4991977007 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.64705882353 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 10.2758426966 195% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.83258426966 248% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17991804537 0.243740707755 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0445608184858 0.0831039109588 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0466219230151 0.0758088955206 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104122696524 0.150359130593 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0556888207627 0.0667264976115 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 14.1392134831 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 100.480337079 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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