"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition." - Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or dis

This issue raises the controversial topic whether society should prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry or other fields by installing them in it, to build a sense of cooperation or competition. However, I partially agree with the statement.
Leadership is not an easy task. A leader must take a decision considering other opinions to make a good decision. A good leader should know how his/her juniors think about anything. Otherwise, things might not work well. For instance, Hitler was very arrogant about his idea and philosophy. He was so confident that if he attacks USSR in world war two, he would be victorious, but he did not listen to his generals about the consequences of attacking the USSR. He failed to cooperate with his generals and as a result, it was considered that USSR played an important role in destroying Germany.
Teamwork is an important matter. In some cases, teamwork is needed more than individual work. For instance, A big company should coordinate each department to produce an expected result. otherwise, it will fail to work.
To run a country, all the departments, as well as people in the government, should work together. To build this sense, a young person should engage early in the system, to know how it works. If a subordinate does not follow his leader, the system would not work. And, if this happens this in nationwide, a government or company will fall surely.
But, Without competition, a person will lose his motion to work hard. For instance, if there is no competition in any sports then, it is more likely that the sportsman would not work hard to become a champion. Another example, eith the competitive mind and wark work, a person will get what he wants and gain the leadership position with his/her hard work.
In Conclusion, cooperation is more needed than the competition, but in some cases, competition is needed to build an individual to become more successful in any field.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 187, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Otherwise
...partment to produce an expected result. otherwise, it will fail to work. To run a countr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, then, well, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, in some cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 58.6224719101 63% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1631.0 2235.4752809 73% => OK
No of words: 331.0 442.535393258 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92749244713 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83722959257 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537764350453 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 704.065955056 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.5130593114 60.3974514979 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.6666666667 118.986275619 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7619047619 23.4991977007 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.80952380952 5.21951772744 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115325802177 0.243740707755 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0340347772455 0.0831039109588 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0641562121736 0.0758088955206 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0770814528637 0.150359130593 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0982258810821 0.0667264976115 147% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 14.1392134831 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 48.8420337079 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 12.1743820225 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 100.480337079 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.8971910112 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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