It is beneficial for the society to teach their young people to keep the sense of the cooperation rather competition, the author asserts. It is true that the cognition of cooperation is indispensable for young people if they want to be a leadership in the future career. However, in my opinion, both the cooperation and competition would be useful for young people to have if they want to be a leadership in the job position.
At first, it is good for youth to maintain the sense of cooperation. In some cases, especially for some jobs which need several companions to solve a difficult problem, it would be impossible for only one people to solve such hard problems. Cooperating with other people would be good for saving time and improving efficiency, which would even beneficial for the whole company. The biologist scientist You You Tu, who had innovatively invented the artemisinin for curing the dangerous prevailing disease malaria, work with her research team for about 10 years in order to solve such difficult medical problem. It is because the approve from her team-mate that she and her team could solve the difficult science problem at that time and finally achieve the laurel of the Nobel Prize of Physiology. If the young people could have a sense of cooperation with their peer or their friends, he or she would have more achievement which would be impossible for only his or her one person.
On the other hands, competition would also useful for young people. In the future career, it would be normal for the people to have competition with other people in order to have a improvement in the job or the finding a job position. Hence, keep competition would keep the youth to know that they should improve themselves constantly and compare themselves with other people so that they would know what is the virtues and drawbacks of themselves. If the company didn't have a competition, everybody who working in the company would not have a sense of working hard. Therefore, the company would be able to make a great progress because everyone in the company didn't have a clear head to make a comparison with each other or even with other entrepreneurs.
In my opinion, it would be plausible for youth if they keep both the cooperation and competition with each other. Because in many situations, these two items would be influenced with each other. No matter in the government or industry or other fields, we should make a cooperation with other people in order to make a great project and also keep the competition sense when facing some important things concerning ourselves such as job promoting or seeking a job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 402, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: You
... whole company. The biologist scientist You You Tu, who had innovatively invented the a...
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Line 2, column 624, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ifficult medical problem. It is because the approve from her team-mate that she and her tea...
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Line 3, column 179, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...tion with other people in order to have a improvement in the job or the finding a...
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Line 3, column 464, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...drawbacks of themselves. If the company didnt have a competition, everybody who worki...
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Line 3, column 661, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...rogress because everyone in the company didnt have a clear head to make a comparison ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, hence, however, if, so, therefore, such as, in my opinion, in some cases, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2181.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 451.0 442.535393258 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83592017738 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7456110159 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.407982261641 0.4932671777 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 681.3 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.3497579918 60.3974514979 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.294117647 118.986275619 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5294117647 23.4991977007 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35294117647 5.21951772744 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211947937662 0.243740707755 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0937389046457 0.0831039109588 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0538939707389 0.0758088955206 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144440730263 0.150359130593 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0569974034238 0.0667264976115 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 100.480337079 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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