The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
The Prompt suggests that society should instill a sense of coorperation and not competition for preparing the younger generation for leadership roles in government, Industry and other fields. While, cooperation does play a role in progress, I would mostly disagree with that statement because of it's all or nothing approach and the way mordern society is structured.
In some Cases and some fields, Co-orperation can be very important for success. Sports can be a good example. For instance, in sports like basketball it is important for the players within a team to play as a single unit to bring the best possible result. The golden state warriors have been a prime example of how coorperation can prove out to important to win games and even championship. However, it is the competitive drive of the players to push themselves as individuals and as a team to always perform at the highest level and bring the best out of each other. Resarch shows that Competitive drive has actually been atrributed to the success of most sports teams .This competitive drive is what has seperated legends of the game from the other players. So while coorperation may have some role to play in the overall process but looking at the bigger picture it is the competitive spirit that has played a role in determining the success of that team or individual that cannot be undermined.
Further, because of the way the mordern society is structured, most mordern political systems witness intense competition among the candidates. For instance, in the national elections of india it is not uncommon for political leaders and candidates berating and denegrating their counterparts from the other competing political party. These political candidates do not shy away from critisizing each other to gain even a slight edge. This political competition can infact, sometimes prove to healthy for such a big democratic country by keeping the person in power in check, by making him think twice of the consequences of doin something non-constituional which would leave him open to the barrage of verbal attacks from the oppositons.If there was coorperation and venality in between the political parties instead, it would've opened the gates for non constitutional acts. This healthy competition has helped such a big democracy to flourish in the mordern world.
In conclusion, while coorperation may have a role in progress, it may not be wise to undermine the importance of instilling a sense of competition in the younger generation considering the way mordern society has been structured.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, however, if, look, may, so, still, while, for instance, in conclusion, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2156.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 418.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15789473684 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01869134303 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 673.2 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 91.2910851191 60.3974514979 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.733333333 118.986275619 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8666666667 23.4991977007 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 5.21951772744 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27754470099 0.243740707755 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0921064296498 0.0831039109588 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0940414299521 0.0758088955206 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187311428388 0.150359130593 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103218379126 0.0667264976115 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 14.1392134831 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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