The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
The claim made here suggests that instilling the quality of cooperation and team work in the youth of the world is a must for giving the world better leaders not just in some specific domain but in all the aspects of life. I agree to the claim made here as the main characteristic of a true leader is the spirit of working together and getting the best out of the team by motivating them.
"United we rise, Divided we fall" is a very apt saying in the context of the claim. One should focus on cooperating with others and working together towards a better future not just for oneself but for the entire humankind. The biggest virtue in a human is the virtue of respecting others' opinions and being openminded towards the views of others. A company can reach greater heights of success if and only if all the members of the various departments work in cooperation with each other rather than competing with each other. A team of football can win the match only if all the players of the team work with the mindset of playing for the team and competing with the opponents and giving their best as a whole rather than competing amongst themselves. The mindset of the youth needs to be changed so as to instill in them the sense of working and making efforts for the entire humankind rather than being selfish and just thinking about their personal benefit. The world out there needs more loving and kind people and leaders making efforts towards making the world a better place to live for the entire humankind.
However, the quality of competetiveness is also a necessary virtue so that each individual strives to do their best and provide the best they can to their surroundings. The quality of competetiveness is only useful when its healthy, unhealthy competition among the students, leaders or people in any field can prove to be harmful in some or the other way. An unhealthy competition of marks or being the top student among the students can give rise to feelings of envy and jealousy which prove to be few of the worst qualities a person can possess. A healthy competition however, can allow the students to make use of their potential to the fullest and allows each of the student to excel in their life.
The qualities of cooperation and competitiveness are both necessary among the youth, but along with that the sense of knowing when the competition turns unhealthy is also equally necessary. Also cooperation can also sometimes lead to the person or the team becoming overly dependent on one another, which has its own disadvantages. Hence any quality or virtue in excess is harmful. The youth should be taught about each of the qualities along with the knowledge and skill to maintain a balance among all of the qualities. A leader has all the virtues and also a sense of maintaining a balance among them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Also,
...ns unhealthy is also equally necessary. Also cooperation can also sometimes lead to ...
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Suggestion: Hence,
...other, which has its own disadvantages. Hence any quality or virtue in excess is harm...
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...e and skill to maintain a balance among all of the qualities. A leader has all the virtues...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, so, still, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2341.0 2235.4752809 105% => OK
No of words: 497.0 442.535393258 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71026156942 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64195914031 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.416498993964 0.4932671777 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 724.5 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 13.0 4.99550561798 260% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.4213459308 60.3974514979 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.055555556 118.986275619 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6111111111 23.4991977007 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.61111111111 5.21951772744 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201584648895 0.243740707755 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0658326498199 0.0831039109588 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0512566351539 0.0758088955206 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114868314278 0.150359130593 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0306290646505 0.0667264976115 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.8420337079 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.1743820225 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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