The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you the discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reason and/or example that could be used to challenge your position.
Humans are naturally social animals who have the propensity for working together with others to bring about collective good. Unlike some animals, we have the capacity to do away with our greed temporarily in order to form alliances with others in order to secure better results or defend ourselves against common enemies. Therefore I strongly believe that the best way to groom the younger ones for leadership position in any field is to instill into them the sense of coorporation instead of competetion.
Cooperation tends to bring about improvement in the general population because people can compliment and cover up one another's defieniency, whereas competition tends to make opposing sides to make more patent and subsequently exploit each others weakness. Since the main aim of leadership not only to make the lives of the followers better bu also to make them the better versions of themselves. Incorporating the sense of patnership into the future leaders would make them find it easier to work with fellow leaders and even the followers for the betterment of everyone. Whereas, needless competition might end up weakening the cohesiveness of the unit or sector thereby making it difficult to make significant progress.
Cooperation does not only catalyses success, it also makes it easier for for flexibility; a very important virtue for any organisation or persons who want to lead. for instances their are instances of political opponents stepping aside for each other in order to achieve something ghreat in elections. An example of that was when the presidential candidate of the Action congress of Nigeria stepped aside for the presidential candidate of the Nigerian people's congress in the 2015 general election. The two party came together and formed a singualar party and defeated the Peoples democratic party in the Election. Such wouldn't have been able to happen without the willingness to cooperate.
Although some would argue that competition tends to bring the best out of us, it is not the competition itself that makes people better, it is the willingness to improve that comes with competition. therefore if we can charge one another - while in alliance - to improve and be a better verson of ourselves, we can definitely achieve similar or even better results. In conclusion, due to it's advantages in building strnger bonds between people, allowing overall improvement, and making flexibility attainable, cooperation should be the virtue to instill into young future leaders instead of competition.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, still, therefore, whereas, while, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2125.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 402.0 442.535393258 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28606965174 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90728859554 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542288557214 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 684.9 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.1759031146 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.666666667 118.986275619 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8 23.4991977007 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.21951772744 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189419744115 0.243740707755 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0639702441615 0.0831039109588 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0535677695051 0.0758088955206 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11326276272 0.150359130593 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0297462013371 0.0667264976115 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 14.1392134831 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.8420337079 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.1639044944 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 100.480337079 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.