The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
When discussing about whether the best way to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation or competition, there are always supporters of the two sides. Although having a sense of competition is sometimes important while dealing with leadership, cooperation is definitely the most important to lead the team to success.
Admittedly, by having a sense of competition can aid the team to success, but the advantage of this strategy is quite limitied in the competition between two teams. For instance, when playing anykind of sport games, if the leader has a strong will for winning, it can boost the team's confidence and also make them play better in the games. However, according to this argument, when discussing about the leadership in government, industry, the sense of competition might sometimes be disadvantageous or even devastating. For it can cause the team to only concentrate on winning but neglect other crucial elements for success.
While prepare young poeple for leadership, coorperation is indeed the most indispensable factor to lead the team towards success. Especially in fields such as government and industry. When working in these fields, having a sense of cooperation can allow leaders to gather the teammates' heart and also make them believe in them selves. Take my own experience as an example. I once worked in a developing team in a technologic company, our leader always hold the believe that as long as our team work together instead of competing with each other, this will lead us to develop the greatest products. By having the same believe, our team successfully developed numerous effective gadgets.
Also, another advantage of cooperation is that it can avoid the people in the team to compete with one another. It is very common that people will want to perform better than other teammates to be seen by their boss and being promoted, so having intuitive competition in mind can cause the team to degenerate. Since competition is more like something we were born to require, it makes the education about cooperation to be more important than ever. By teaching children to cooperate with others can benifit them when they are dealing with problems with their team.
In conclusion, since competition is everywhere in peoples' mind, cooperation should be taught when they are young. Giving them the thought to cooperate can benifit in success.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 279, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teams'' or 'team's'?
Suggestion: teams'; team's
...rong will for winning, it can boost the teams confidence and also make them play bett...
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Line 5, column 232, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rking in these fields, having a sense of cooperation can allow leaders to gather ...
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Line 5, column 278, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teammates'' or 'teammate's'?
Suggestion: teammates'; teammate's
...eration can allow leaders to gather the teammates heart and also make them believe in the...
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Line 5, column 324, Rule ID: THEM_SELVES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'themselves'?
Suggestion: themselves
...tes heart and also make them believe in them selves. Take my own experience as an example. ...
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Line 5, column 459, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...nologic company, our leader always hold the believe that as long as our team work together ...
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Line 5, column 463, Rule ID: BELIEVE_BELIEF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'belief' (noun) instead of believe (verb)?
Suggestion: belief
...gic company, our leader always hold the believe that as long as our team work together ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, still, while, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2069.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 402.0 442.535393258 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14676616915 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89208926938 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497512437811 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 642.6 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.10617977528 290% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.873817094 60.3974514979 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.944444444 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3333333333 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.83333333333 5.21951772744 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229439303379 0.243740707755 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.082888831356 0.0831039109588 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0782674953054 0.0758088955206 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157550177675 0.150359130593 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0847453189973 0.0667264976115 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.