The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim.
In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Some people believe that leadership in various fields including government and industry is best achieved through a sense of cooperation and not competition. I strongly agree with this. In my opinion, I believe that the best method to prepare young people for leadership is by teaching them cooperation for two reasons.
First, having a sense of corporation will enable leaders to recognize the collective strength of their team members and utilize that to achieve greater results. For instance, in the banking industry, the manager of a bank can create an enabling environment where each member of staff can see one another as part of a team. This, will in no doubt drive organizational growth and enable them to achieve greater results as a team. In essence, together, everybody achieves more.
Secondly, a sitting government cannot thrive without cooperation among its cabinet members or government officials. A government is usually composed of several arms and bodies, all working together to achieve a common goal. For instance, the president of a country has to be able to work cooperatively with the vice president, governors, mayors and other government representatives. If they are going to be successful, they need to exhibit cooperation, rather than competition.
In conclusion, although some may argue that the best way to prepare young people for leadership is by instilling competition in them, this is not totally true. It may be argued that competition can drive growth but it is a two-sided dice. If it turns out to be negative, this can lead to a disaster and total failure in leadership. Hence, cooperation is the best choice.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, as to, for instance, in conclusion, no doubt, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 58.6224719101 63% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1389.0 2235.4752809 62% => OK
No of words: 268.0 442.535393258 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1828358209 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.55969084622 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02010001841 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 215.323595506 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.585820895522 0.4932671777 119% => OK
syllable_count: 432.0 704.065955056 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.9160204035 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.6 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8666666667 23.4991977007 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.73333333333 5.21951772744 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272660287816 0.243740707755 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0868790401374 0.0831039109588 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0945380364017 0.0758088955206 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170535812342 0.150359130593 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10851751629 0.0667264976115 163% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.1392134831 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 100.480337079 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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