The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
The statement reported above argues that young people should develop collaborative skills in order to be ready for their future working life. Personally, I tend to agree with the author since in a world where the competition is even higher, learning how to collaborate is important and strongly recommended.
First of all, to my mind it is fundamental to teach children the importance and the advantages of leaning on one other. As a matter of fact, I believe that cooperation is a point of strength for young generations since sharing knowledge can leads to huge mutual improvements.
Nevertheless, nowadays cooperation and mutual helping are commonly considered as a form of weakness and the majority try always to demonstrate their ability to do things by their own.
Regardless, this issue could be handled by supporting the setting up of collaborations between children whose strengths and weaknesses are complementary. For example, a young football player that has some scholastic weakness could be helped by a smart pupil who is brilliant at school. It is noticeable that the benefits would not be one-sided since the sportive guy could, for instance, teach to the other one some football skills.
In addition, the working scene is even more frequently requiring their employees to work in small groups and not individually. Furthermore, team building activities is spreading up among the most important companies and this fact underlines the need to learn since the youngest age to work surrounded by a collaborative mood.
I’m entirely convinced that the only way to achieve this final result is changing the education provided by schools. For instance, teachers should promote more groups projects such as presentations about specific topics or even some shared revision of the latest lesson’s argument. To put it in another way: if teacher would boost student to collaboration, they would be getting even more used to work together and huge improvements would be done even in the short term.
In conclusion, I entirely support cooperation between young people and I am strongly convinced that investing in this kind of initiative would be revolutionary for our society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 242, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'lead'
...generations since sharing knowledge can leads to huge mutual improvements. Neverthel...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, nevertheless, so, even so, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a matter of fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1849.0 2235.4752809 83% => OK
No of words: 350.0 442.535393258 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28285714286 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04873208842 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 215.323595506 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585714285714 0.4932671777 119% => OK
syllable_count: 564.3 704.065955056 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 24.9931623302 60.3974514979 41% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 132.071428571 118.986275619 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 23.4991977007 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.2142857143 5.21951772744 215% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.97078651685 141% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148445809402 0.243740707755 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0528194124656 0.0831039109588 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0467495076589 0.0758088955206 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0750481141743 0.150359130593 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0472952904238 0.0667264976115 71% => OK
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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