Many lives might be saved if inoculations against cow flu were routinely administered to all people in areas where the disease is detected. However, since there is a small possibility that a person will die as a result of the inoculations, we cannot permit inoculations against cow flu to be routinely administered.
The author of the sentence above while supporting that inoculations should not be administrated has provided arguments that are generally not well supported and that can be easily refuted. As a matter of fact, three main logical problems can easily be found.
Firstly, even if the writer's assumption that the adoption of inoculations in areas affected by the cow flu would save many lives could be extremely correct, he did not provide any proof of that. I agree that it is reasonable to say that since it seems to be one of the most worthy idea to avoid the spread of the outbreak but, without having any scientific or at least statistic fundations his proposal could not be proven.
Secondly, he has argued that inoculations have to be administred just in the areas where the desease has been detected. He has not explained further what he was meaning with his sentence, but, in order to ensure the stop of the spread, the best option would be to inoculate not only the places which has been affected at the moment but even the one that are more likely to be affected in the future, in order to protect them.
Finally, his attention has moved on the grade of danger of inoculation. In particular, he has suggested that, as there is a tiny possibility that this measure could cause deaths, it should not be adopted. Of course his view seems to be wise and responsable but he has not provided any data about the amount of real deaths due to the cow flu and of the hypotethical ones due to the inoculations. All this is to say that if the former would be way higher than the ladder the adoption of this measure will be worth and it will avoid many deaths.
In conclusion, I am strongly convinced that if more proofs would have been provided and if his reasonament would have been well-rounded, his thesis could have been correct. Anyway the text have some logical issues and his analysis is too vague so his final adfirmation could not be considered ad welll-reasoned.
Comments
e-rater score report
Sentence: I agree that it is reasonable to say that since it seems to be one of the most worthy idea to avoid the spread of the outbreak but, without having any scientific or at least statistic fundations his proposal could not be proven.
Error: fundations Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Secondly, he has argued that inoculations have to be administred just in the areas where the desease has been detected.
Error: administred Suggestion: administered
Error: desease Suggestion: decease
Sentence: Finally, his attention has moved on the grade of danger of inoculation.
Error: inoculation Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Of course his view seems to be wise and responsable but he has not provided any data about the amount of real deaths due to the cow flu and of the hypotethical ones due to the inoculations.
Error: responsable Suggestion: responsible
Error: hypotethical Suggestion: hypothetical
Sentence: In conclusion, I am strongly convinced that if more proofs would have been provided and if his reasonament would have been well-rounded, his thesis could have been correct.
Error: well-rounded Suggestion: well rounded
Error: reasonament Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Anyway the text have some logical issues and his analysis is too vague so his final adfirmation could not be considered ad welll-reasoned.
Error: adfirmation Suggestion: affirmation
Error: welll-reasoned Suggestion: well reasoned
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 351 350
No. of Characters: 1587 1500
No. of Different Words: 177 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.328 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.521 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.565 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 97 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 66 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 50 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.531 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.917 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.371 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.667 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.169 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 22, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...asily be found. Firstly, even if the writers assumption that the adoption of inocula...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 158, Rule ID: NON_ACTION_CONTINUOUS[2]
Message: The verb mean is usually not used with a continuous form, use the simple form instead. Suggestion: 'meant'
Suggestion: meant
...d. He has not explained further what he was meaning with his sentence, but, in order to ens...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 158, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...d. He has not explained further what he was meaning with his sentence, but, in order to ens...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 141, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ted that, as there is a tiny possibility that this measure could cause deaths, it...
^^
Line 7, column 367, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... to the cow flu and of the hypotethical ones due to the inoculations. All this is to...
^^^^
Line 9, column 60, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had been'?
Suggestion: had been
... strongly convinced that if more proofs would have been provided and if his reasonament would h...
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Line 9, column 108, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had been'?
Suggestion: had been
...ve been provided and if his reasonament would have been well-rounded, his thesis could have bee...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 244, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...cal issues and his analysis is too vague so his final adfirmation could not be co...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, but, finally, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, well, while, at least, in conclusion, in particular, of course, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1629.0 2260.96107784 72% => OK
No of words: 351.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64102564103 5.12650576532 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65196412002 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51566951567 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 705.55239521 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.0473807721 57.8364921388 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.75 119.503703932 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.25 23.324526521 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.25 5.70786347227 215% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162784972151 0.218282227539 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.067692905935 0.0743258471296 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0571824182609 0.0701772020484 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0953698381197 0.128457276422 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0506162195518 0.0628817314937 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 12.5979740519 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 98.500998004 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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