In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for government to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.
Today, fast food are becoming more and more popular and, unsurprisingly, the number of people affected by health diseases is increasing. To my mind, the only way governments can try to solve this problem is by taxing the price of unhealthy foods. The taxation would have two main consequences on societies’ attitudes.
Firstly, junk food would lose one of its main features: its convenience. As a matter of fact, people do not buy junk food simply because of its delicious taste, but primarly because it provides complete meals at a really cheap price. For this reason, individuals, in particular the ones from the lowest social classes, do not have the financial availability to buy vegetables or fruits and opt for unhealthy food. Therefore, if fast food were taxed many citizens would avoid it and, thus, they health conditions would improve.
In addition, if governments decided to impose the taxation, many people would take this problem more seriously. As a matter of fact I am convinced that the highest percentage of the people who usually eats fast food is not aware of the bad consequences they have on their health. This taxation would make it clear that unhealthy eating is a serious problem and so, it would help to raise awareness and not to underestimate this serious problem.
In conclusion, I believe that governments should impose a strict taxation on fast food because it would be the only solution to reduce its consumption and, thus, problems on consumers’ health. The introduction of this policy not only will help people to become deeplier aware of this problem, but also it would make junk food more expensive and so less accessible.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...would take this problem more seriously. As a matter of fact I am convinced that th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, really, so, therefore, thus, in addition, in conclusion, in particular, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1393.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01079136691 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80973937774 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543165467626 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 429.3 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.6466160809 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.083333333 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1666666667 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1666666667 7.06120827912 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265200026673 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105090385864 0.084324248473 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0427691627258 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17742429216 0.151304729494 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0117707178323 0.056905535591 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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