Universities should require students to take courses only within those fields they are interested in studying.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
The author of the statement above argued that university students should be required to attend only the courses which best match their field of interest. Personally, I tend to mostly disagree with his sentence as even if today high specialization is strictly required in business scene, it is also fundamental to keep a wide knowledge.
In this essay I will introduce my personal opinion, providing support for my thesis on both working and personal side.
Firstly, I will take into account the effects of the policy implementation on working side.
Even thought it is often argued that the hire of more specialized students often increase the technical level of a company, positive results on the net productivity are less certain. In the latest times, it is becoming even more common to make people work in multidisciplinary teams. For this reason, I am strongly convinced that having a wider knowledge, which involves also other fields aside from the one of main interest, could help employees to better collaborate and understand each other.
Yet the implementation of the strategy suggested would bring more skilled student, it may be too much dangerous for the working environment.
On the other side of the argument, having a multi-fields background studies could support people also in their personal lives. As a matter of fact, having different interest make individuals more open-minded and motivated to understand the world more as a whole than as something divided into tiny pieces. A good example of that were 15th century’s scientists, as Galileo Galilei. He is worldwide known for his physical studies, but just the minority know that he was a brilliant writer too. Of course his books were about his scientific researches but his writing style suggests that he also had a deep background in literature.
Because of this, the policy adoption may also have represent a risk as it would make students less passionate about life and less eager to know.
In conclusion, the approach described in the sentence above would be dangerous for pupils in both their working and personal life, as they won’t be able to interact with people coming from different studies and they will lose an overall view of what the world is.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 319, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[4]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'wide knowledge'.
Suggestion: wide knowledge
...s scene, it is also fundamental to keep a wide knowledge. In this essay I will introduce my per...
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Line 2, column 35, Rule ID: PERSONAL_OPINION_FRIENDSHIP[1]
Message: Use simply 'opinion'.
Suggestion: opinion
...dge. In this essay I will introduce my personal opinion, providing support for my thesis on bot...
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Line 8, column 252, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[1]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
... motivated to understand the world more as a whole than as something divided into ...
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Line 9, column 52, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'represented'.
Suggestion: represented
...this, the policy adoption may also have represent a risk as it would make students less p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, so, in conclusion, of course, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1880.0 2235.4752809 84% => OK
No of words: 369.0 442.535393258 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09485094851 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82677001912 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566395663957 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.020643709 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.333333333 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6 23.4991977007 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.21951772744 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.97078651685 161% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169554401929 0.243740707755 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0525224642663 0.0831039109588 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.052228856109 0.0758088955206 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0719519285272 0.150359130593 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0357937074368 0.0667264976115 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 100.480337079 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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