Some people pursue career paths that lead to management positions. Other people follow career paths leading to positions of individual responsibility, which do not involve managing others.
Which career path are you more likely to follow?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Today there are mainly two kind of career’s options. A first one involves mostly the organization of what other people have to do and the evaluation of how well they operate. The other one is more focused on each person's own work and how well he is doing individually. Even if they both are needed in the current working scene, the differences between them are significant and I would prefer the ladder to the former for mainly two reasons.
First, I am eager to know even more about how this world works and, thus, I am deeply focused on my personal growth rather than others'. As a matter of fact, I am taking into consideration the option of doing a PhD after I will have finished my bachelor and master studies in order to expand my knowledge in my area of interest and to understand all the aspects that at the moment are still partially unclear. Even if working alone gives you more responsibility to handle, I would surely prefer to take some risks rather than losing my autonomy.
In addition, I believe that coordinating a group of different people is a really difficult task and that, in order to do it, you must have a natural inclination in relating with others. Thus, even if I love spending my time with other people, I do not think I would be able to rightly achieve this task. For instance, if I had to correct an employee because he did a wrong task that had some bad consequences on my firm's business, I think I would just get angry and disappointed with him without solving the real problem.
In conclusion, the choice of the working position mostly depends on the personality of each individual. To my mind, I believe that I would better suit in a career in which I do not have to manage other people's work because by doing that I would be able to be more focused on my own activity and I needn't to struggle with other employees to correct their errors.
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Suggestion: needn't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, really, so, still, thus, well, for instance, i think, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1540.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 344.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.47674418605 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59966299767 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526162790698 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 494.1 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.0585669524 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.333333333 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.6666666667 20.6045352989 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0833333333 5.45110844103 185% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156000115963 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0620404753827 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0538212036311 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10502524969 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0635406348138 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.1575268817 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.3 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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