The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Creating a competitive environment for young people can have a positive impact on students as it can help them to achieve their goals.
But a good leader has the ability to cooperate with others and maintain a congenial environment by appreciating other's efforts.
Therefore, I fundamentally agree with the claim that the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in any field is through cooperation and not competition. My viewpoints are aptly illustrated through the below-mentioned examples.
Firstly, while, competition may have several positive impacts, it may induce selfishness and avarice in individuals.
Young people are always determined to achieve their goals in their lives. Excessive competition causes them to have a strong desire of achieving their own interests while not caring for other's views or opinions. Perhaps, the strong interest to come 'first' in any competition may lead them to disregard other's advice or they may not appreciate other people's efforts. They might get themselves involved in a mad race,
where their ultimate goal would be to rise above others and for doing so they may resort to immoral actions. For instance, consider a school that has set up an exam to test the students' abilities in various subjects. The person who scores the highest marks would also be rewarded. Under the greed of getting a reward, a student may tend to resort to immoral actions such as cheating on the test. Further, he could not listen to any teacher's advice or maybe he won't help any other student with his doubts or difficulties so that only he can score the highest marks. In such a scenario, even if he does get a high score, it cannot be proved that the student is a good leader. A good leader has a sense of cooperation and is one who helps others as well as uses moral means to achieve one's goals.
In addition to this, cooperation causes the individual to appreciate other's opinions. For instance, in a workforce, the manager has to appreciate other people's suggestions for the successful completion of any project. He should give a fair chance for everyone to give their own input for the completion of any complex task. Through this approach, probably he may be able to solve the problem quickly and efficiently. Further, consider the leader of the nation, who has a major responsibility of gaining the trust of the people. If he simply disregards the population's opinion about any political matters such as implementing a new policy, then this won't help him in achieving his goals as this would weaken the people's trust and the leader would probably have to face protest from certain groups.
To sum up, although in certain scenarios competition can have a positive impact on a person as it can encourage him to improve himself and be better than others in several aspects, what should be essentially taught the students is cooperation. Through instilling a sense of cooperation, the young people will be able to respect other's opinions and hence
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, so, still, then, therefore, well, while, as to, for instance, in addition, such as, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2547.0 2235.4752809 114% => OK
No of words: 510.0 442.535393258 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99411764706 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75217629947 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75243347645 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492156862745 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 787.5 704.065955056 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.3779245438 60.3974514979 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.772727273 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1818181818 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.72727272727 5.21951772744 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 16.0 4.97078651685 322% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 21.0 7.80617977528 269% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21225909937 0.243740707755 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0659115963976 0.0831039109588 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0826641960927 0.0758088955206 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0780989359722 0.150359130593 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0833476751082 0.0667264976115 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.1392134831 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.