The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competition Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree wi

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

The balance of competition and cooperation among the members specially the young members of a society is crucial for its development. The prompt says, instilling a sense of cooperation in the young minds of a society will better serve in making future leaders. I mostly agree with this for two reasons.
Firstly, competition prioritizes self interest over the interest of the whole community. And, there are times when these two conflict. Even if they don't, it is the sense of cooperation that is will help a true leader to think more about the interests of his/her followers. For example, during the cold war between Russia and America in the late 1965, it is competition that led them to be enemies of each other rather than making one of them leading the other. Leadership requires the trust of his/her followers. Trust is built when a person or nation is helping out others in their bad times, sharing maybe a secret technology or scarce resource with them. Competiting mind won't allow someone to share his/her resources with others. Thus precluding any chance of building trust and effective leadership.
Secondly, competition instills in a mind an urge to win by any means. Winning mentality is good. But, when a competitive mind doesn't find any viable way he/she can really beat their opponents, it will resort to ways that are harmful to the society. Cooperation, on the other hand, is not winnnig alone. If someone from a community does better in a field, it is a matter of pride for the whole community. So, in co-operative mind it is more important to win as a whole than individual winnings.
However, a sense of competition is also needed for a community to do better. Yes, it is cooperation that is the foremost of making leadership effective. But, the leader needs to have an urge to do than other communities as a whole. If there is no sense of competition, the society might even start to dwindle. As we know, nothing remains still with time. Even to keep pace with the developing world, a leader needs to find ways for the betterment of his/her community. For example. if a general manager of a production unit of automobiles doesn't have any sense of competition, he'll eventually lose his job. Because, with time the rival companies will adopt to latest technologies and increase their production and this manager won't feel the need to do so, not without a sense of competition. As a result his company will start to lose market share and a decrease in the total production and sales. So it is imperative to have a sense of competition, even to hold the same ground.
To conclude, I would say, for an effective leadership, a balance of cooperation and competition is needed-with the balance, obviously tilted towards the cooperation part. Cooperation will teach young minds to help others, make them able to solve different problems, making them better human being and better intellectuals as well. But, a tatal absence of competition is not good as well

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, still, thus, well, for example, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 12.9106741573 209% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2467.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 510.0 442.535393258 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83725490196 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75217629947 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81409712651 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492156862745 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 783.9 704.065955056 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.2370786517 148% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.9394479986 60.3974514979 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.2333333333 118.986275619 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 23.4991977007 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.56666666667 5.21951772744 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.2758426966 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217044140088 0.243740707755 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0582381976233 0.0831039109588 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0483306707346 0.0758088955206 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13939899013 0.150359130593 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0516987790057 0.0667264976115 77% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 14.1392134831 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.8420337079 128% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 100.480337079 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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