The best way for a society to prepare its young people
for leadership in government, industry, or other fields 1s
by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not
competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to
which you agree or disagree with the claim. In
developing and supporting your position, be sure to
address the most compelling reasons and/or examples
that could be used to challenge your position.
The environment class="that">that class="young">young people lives in plays a vital role in their class="success">success in future. All people class="around">around class="them">them such as family, teachers, friends contributes to form their perspective and attitude class="toward">toward life. however, the question class="that">that living in a competition environment or in cooperation one class="is">is class="better">better for teenager's leadership skills has become a central topic of debate between educators. In my point of view, class="young">young people class="need">need to be involved in both those types of environment for the complete development because of 2 reasons.
First of all, nobody class="can">can be successful alone class="without">without class="support">support from others. Thus, teenagers class="must">must class="learn">learn class="how">how to stay hamorny with people class="around">around class="them">them, especially to their pair. No one class="would">would willing to give class="support">support to an arrogant and selfish person class="who">who class="would">would class="do">do anything to win. For example, in school, students class="need">need to class="get">get voted to be a class="leader">leader of the class or club. there are no opportunity for students class="who">who are pugnacious class="toward">toward their friends to be class="leader">leader. Another example of the class="need">need for cooperation class="is">is there are several tasks requiring team work in which people class="must">must master at working together class="without">without egotist. Therefore, class="young">young people require an environment in which people class="support">support each other to develop the right attitude class="toward">toward others.
Secondly, teenager also needs to experience in a sense of competition to motivate and inspire class="them">them to overcome themselves. The hunger of being the best and being respected class="is">is human nature. if class="young">young people class="must">must compete to be the best, they class="would">would push themselves hard to be class="better">better. For example, in a class, if students class="get">get reward because of their highest score in the exam, all of class="them">them class="would">would study harder and try their best they class="can">can. it class="is">is clear class="that">that competing helps class="young">young people to be a class="better">better version of themselves. however, some people argue class="that">that competition class="would">would lead to negative behavior. class="young">young people class="would">would have immoral actions to defeat others. it class="is">is true to a miror but not a majority. Moreover, to be a class="leader">leader in future, teenagers class="must">must class="learn">learn class="how">how to treat right to people, not only doing anything to win.
In conclusion, I believe class="that">that competition environment class="is">is as important as the cooperation one for the class="success">success of teenagers.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ir class='success'>success in future. All people class='around'>...
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Suggestion: However
...lass='toward'>toward life. however, the question class='that'>...
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Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to class'
Suggestion: to class
...t;must class='learn'>learn class='how'>how to stay hamorny ...
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Suggestion: There
...r'>leader of the class or club. there are no opportunity for students class=&...
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Suggestion: If
...lass='is'>is human nature. if class='young'>young people...
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Suggestion: It
...best they class='can'>can. it class='is'>is clear class=...
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Message: Did you mean 'classes'?
Suggestion: classes
...t they class='can'>can. it class='is'>is clear class='...
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Suggestion: However
...'>better version of themselves. however, some people argue class='that&apo...
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Suggestion: Class
...os;>would lead to negative behavior. class='young'>young people class...
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Suggestion: It
... have immoral actions to defeat others. it class='is'>is true to a mi...
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Message: Did you mean 'classes'?
Suggestion: classes
...ve immoral actions to defeat others. it class='is'>is true to a miror bu...
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Line 13, column 1244, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...be a class='leader'>leader in future, teenagers class='must'>mu...
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Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to class'
Suggestion: to class
...t;must class='learn'>learn class='how'>how to treat right t...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for example, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3528.0 2235.4752809 158% => OK
No of words: 374.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 9.43315508021 5.05705443957 187% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 10.2054130092 2.79657885939 365% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 193.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516042780749 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 925.2 704.065955056 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 2.5 1.59117977528 157% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.38483146067 274% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.6828959753 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 168.0 118.986275619 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8095238095 23.4991977007 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.14285714286 5.21951772744 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 7.80617977528 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0210641771995 0.243740707755 9% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0189849008946 0.0831039109588 23% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0160347237297 0.0758088955206 21% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.01939194226 0.150359130593 13% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00739597436619 0.0667264976115 11% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 31.9 14.1392134831 226% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -21.92 48.8420337079 -45% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.5 12.1743820225 168% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 37.12 12.1639044944 305% => Coleman_liau_index is high.
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 100.480337079 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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