[Claim] Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive. [Reason] It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Compared to not giving any financial to the major cities, I believe it is more likely for the nation to support the major cities needs in order to thrive.
Some argue that supporting major cities finance would lead to inadequate budget on other aspects of development of the nation. However, those people neglects the role that major cities play in economical development. Major cities usually provide a lot of opportunities for those wanting to find works. It is in fact major cities that lead the development of the nation. For example, Taipei , major and also capital city in Taiwan, is the core of economy in the nations. Without appropriate support from the government, it is likely that the quality of the life and salary for Taiwanese couldn’t reach what people enjoy today and that adult may face bigger challenges for finding adequate job.
Additionally, it is primarily in cities that a nations cultural traditions are generated and preserved. With a well support from the government, the cultural relic and tradition can get better restoration and also draw more attention from the public so as to prevent people from forgetting their own identity, past ,and root. For example, Fort Sandinmigo is the relic that remained from the time that Dutch governed Taiwan in seventeenth centuries. Thanks for the preservation from the government, Fort Sandinmigo reminds Taiwanese of not only the history that people were governed by the intruders but also how diverse Taiwan culture is .
Finally, devoting to improving the development of the major city can help the nation to escalate its own international position among the country. For example ,Hong Kong is a major city in China. Its ideally geographical location enable the city to become the core of transportation in the Asia. Many airlines need to pass through or stop there, which indicates the importance of the city. It can easily be observed that the government of China took lots of effort to build and refine the city including renew the airport and harbor and giving lots of financial support in order to draw more tourist to travel there . With the devotion from China government, Hong Kong shines among other cities in the world, which shows their inconsiderable competitiveness.
All in all, major cities are like the cores of the machine. Without good cares from its owner, it’s hard for the machine to work appropriately and efficiently. Hence, I believe it is necessary for the nation to give financial support to the major cities in order to stand out and thrive among other nations.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, hence, however, if, may, so, well, as to, for example, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2141.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 425.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03764705882 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7278465145 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505882352941 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 685.8 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.7674141872 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.05 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.25 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.1 5.21951772744 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.35430391091 0.243740707755 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124872971006 0.0831039109588 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0926401547409 0.0758088955206 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223118547415 0.150359130593 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.049468684408 0.0667264976115 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 100.480337079 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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