Imagine that your city government has permitted a major company to build a large factory near your neighborhood. Do you think this is a good idea? Why or why not? Explain your position using specific reasons and examples.
With the fast growth of the industry, factories expand swiftly and require more areas. Some people agree that the government should permit the company to have a factory near their neighborhood, while others refuse to construct a factory beside their living space. As far as I'm concerned, I support the latter.
To begin with, constructing a large factory compromises the environment and the life used to live there. When building a new factory, a new area is needed. The company must erase the all trees and life in the area. Many animals have no choice but to flee away to find other habitats. In fact, most of the animals couldn't find the ideal place and might face the danger of extinction. For example, the Amazon forest once was full of abundant animals and trees. However, because more and more companies need space for constructing factories, more and more natural environments give way to these buildings. In the end, creatures are hard to survive. The environment is damaged as well. Hence, if the government allows the new factory to be built, they could be treated as an indirect murderer of nature. That's because the government permits the damage to the environment happening, which could, in fact, be stopped by them. Hence, constructing a big factory should be opposed and not accepted.
Last but not least, having a large factory near our neighborhood can reduce the quality of residents' life. Factories produce varieties variety of pollution. If residents just live next to the factories, they have no choice but to endure this uncomfortable living environment, which results in having an unbearable life. For example, if a large oil factory locates beside the resident's house, he may need to stand for poor air quality every day due to the release of the toxic chemical during the processing of oil. In the long run, he may have cancer or throat problems. Or, factories can make unbearable noises when the machines are working. This will cause the resident to have a sleeping problem and negatively affect his life quality. Hence, to save their health and have an enjoyable life, people should keep these factories away from their living environment and stop the government to make a horrible decision.
Irrefutably, some people might argue that building a factory can help boost the economy because it offers more opportunities for workers to find jobs. However, what they neglect is that this means we have to sacrifice our natural environment and damage the life living in it. Also, the residents' life there can be spoiled. Thus, in my opinion, the government shouldn't allow the construction of the factory.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, so, thus, well, while, for example, in fact, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2193.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98409090909 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65795916087 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 695.7 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.6097238928 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.2222222222 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2962962963 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.03703703704 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.85842293907 337% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110029999626 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0302847467096 0.076458572812 40% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0322269049638 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0773327984865 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0242292004164 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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