[Claim] Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive. [Reason] It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
I strongly disagreed that governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive on the grounds that it is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Cultures, being a country’s symbol and spirit, permeate the whole country. If the governments only pay their attention to the cities, they are bound to lose a lot of the quintessential of the country’s culture. For example, in Taiwan, hospitality is of great importance in our culture. However, this kind of warmth has being tempered by a sense of alienation in big cities like Taipei, the capital of Taiwan, due to the commercialism and the hectic pace of city life. If the government provides a lot of financial support to Taipei simply because Taipei is the capital, thus the political and economic center of Taiwan, we will unfortunately lose a lot of culture treasure of this country.
On the other hand, focusing on big cities will likely to leave the country in a state of stagnation. While, at first glance, financing big cities will help boost the economy of the whole country, big cities are highly developed areas where huge improvements are not easily made. Areas other than cities, though being easily ignored, has a lot of cultural potential that can be further developed. Taiwan government has a plan called “One town, one characteristic,” which helps each town discover its own characteristic, turn it into business, and finally boost the economy.
Finally, equality is also important. The situation that poverty-stricken, undeveloped areas become more poor and affluent, highly developed areas become wealthier will pose a threat to the stability of the country, especially when this is caused by the governments supporting the cities due to their cultural traditions. This is not only an economic and cultural problem, but a matter of discrimination, which may stirs (stir) great turmoil in the country.
Thus, it is inappropriate for governments to give financial support to major cities owing to their more preserved and generated cultures.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 185, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a nation' or simply 'nations'?
Suggestion: a nation; nations
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, so, thus, while, for example, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 58.6224719101 72% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1786.0 2235.4752809 80% => OK
No of words: 341.0 442.535393258 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23753665689 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02292704307 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.533724340176 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 558.9 704.065955056 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.714476904 60.3974514979 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.571428571 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3571428571 23.4991977007 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.21428571429 5.21951772744 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.367173252404 0.243740707755 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120792581451 0.0831039109588 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.192190291558 0.0758088955206 254% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.278442860511 0.150359130593 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.251140706073 0.0667264976115 376% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.1392134831 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 100.480337079 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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