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It is as important for older people to study and learn new things as it is for young people.

"Learning is the lifelong goal" is often cited in magazine or the books. Some think it's important for older people to study and learn new things as it is for young people, while others disagree with it. From my perspective, I support the latter.
To begin with, most of older people are retired and don't need to compete in the work, so it is not important for them to acquire new skills or knowledge. In young people, competitiveness is an important key values. If people stop learning, it will be easier for them to be replaced by others, which causes them not to be able to get promoted or even be fired in work. In contrast, older people are retired. They don't work anymore, so learning new things is no longer a priority for them. For example, my grandfather was an IT worker in the past. after he retires, he don't need to search the new skills and information on the Internet any more. He can enjoy his tea time and explore his interest without standing with the heavy pressure from the newly competitive generations during the work. Hence, in my opinion, older people don't oblige to learn new things like the young generations.
Last but not least, older people don't have to study and learn new things because of their decreasing ability in learning. When human gets older, more cells of the brain would die. Without a great number of neural cells, people are not able to learn and react fast. This make it hard for elderly to learn efficiently compared to young people. For example, Smartphone have been created for several years. I still remember I just spent less an hour to get acquainted with the device when I first used it. However, My grandmother has still not been used to it since we presented her the phone last year. She always forgot how to use the interface to dial the phone after we taught her for several times. Hence, it's not necessary for elderly to learn new things as for the young people.
Irrefutably, some might assert that older people need to learn new things because they will think life is boring if they don't have new things or incentives in their life. However, what they neglect is that it's hard for older people to learn new things. That might be a burden for them. Hence, I still think it is not as critical for older people to study and learn new things as it is for young people.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, so, still, while, as for, for example, in contrast, in my opinion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1914.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 422.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5355450237 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36251527052 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471563981043 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 581.4 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.7013024292 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.56 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.88 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.48 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.628136234205 0.236089414692 266% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.193638416736 0.076458572812 253% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.17386143396 0.0737576698707 236% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.455595948813 0.150856017488 302% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0720073128802 0.0645574589148 112% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.09 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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