Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? “People should keep trying to reach their goals, even if they seem impossible to achieve.” Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position.
People must have their own goal which may be hard to achieve or easy for them in their life. Speaking of a seemingly impossible goal, some might give up, while some still try to reach it. As far as I am concerned, people should insist on pursuing their goals and never give in to failure.
To begin with, people are able to learn lots of things through pursuing their goals even that it seems hard to achieve. In fact, in most of the time, it is the process instead of the result that matters. People often learn more and be able to acquire different techniques while trying to reach their goals. For example, we all know GPA matters a lot in applying for the college. If now there's a student with a really low GPA but wants to study in MIT. It seems impossible for him to receive application. However, He still strive hard by working hard on his research with the professor and becoming an intern in well-known firm. Regardless of whether he gets the application or not, he indeed learn a lot and has lots more experiences than a common student. Hence, although the goal is hard to achieve, we are able to acquire lot of knowledge and experience. That's already worthwhile no matter the result is bad or not.
Last but not least, people can be more matured in the process of catching their goals. We all know reaching an impossible is an arduous task. However, it is through experiencing this process can help our mind be tougher, determined and calm. Take the student with the low GPA as an example again. Though, he knows he has little chance to be accepted by MIT. Nevertheless, through the training under the professor and the experience in the firm, he is mellower and able to handle many difficult problems on his own. For example, he used to become extremely panic if he hadn't finished his work while the deadline came close. However, now he is able to cope with the task calmly and finish it efficiently. Hence, it is the obstacles on the way to the goal that helps people to grow a lot. Even if the goal seems impossible, people still benefit a lot while pursuing their goals.
Irrefutably, some might oppose that people should strive for the impossible goal. They think it is a waste of time and that people should change a easier goal to ensure the result is good. Still, what they neglect is that all the physical and mental benefits acquiring during the process is the more valuable than the good result. Hence, in my opinion, people should keep trying to reach their goals even if they seem impossible to achieve.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: there's
...lot in applying for the college. If now theres a student with a really low GPA but wan...
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Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'strives'.
Suggestion: strives
... receive application. However, He still strive hard by working hard on his research wi...
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Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'learns'.
Suggestion: learns
... gets the application or not, he indeed learn a lot and has lots more experiences tha...
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Suggestion: That's
...cquire lot of knowledge and experience. Thats already worthwhile no matter the result...
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Message: “Though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...t with the low GPA as an example again. Though, he knows he has little chance to be ac...
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Suggestion: hadn't
...he used to become extremely panic if he hadnt finished his work while the deadline ca...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...e of time and that people should change a easier goal to ensure the result is goo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, may, nevertheless, really, so, still, well, while, for example, in fact, speaking of, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2076.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 457.0 442.535393258 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54266958425 5.05705443957 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40621033325 2.79657885939 86% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477024070022 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 627.3 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.1340849812 60.3974514979 43% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 76.8888888889 118.986275619 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9259259259 23.4991977007 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.14814814815 5.21951772744 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253937491778 0.243740707755 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0774630652361 0.0831039109588 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0856872205658 0.0758088955206 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1885847581 0.150359130593 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.071081106957 0.0667264976115 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 14.1392134831 59% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 48.8420337079 148% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 12.1743820225 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 12.1639044944 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.02 8.38706741573 84% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 100.480337079 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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