Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.
Scandal is like a lust. It attracts people’s eyes help focus the attention from the public that no speaker or reformer ever do. As far as I am concerned, it results from following reasons.
Although some might argue that scandal is a negative information which is not appropriate to pervade or even promulgate among the society. They are afraid of the occasionally wrong information could affect citizen’s opinion and behavior. However, what they neglect is that scandal shows the ugly or dark side of humanity which doesn’t expose to others easily. Realizing this kind of reality is really important because after one starts working in the society , this unfairness and malice is something that he or she has to face. For example, Sulli, a Korean popular singer, committed suicide in 2019 because of the cyber bully in the internet. It drawn everyone attention and force government and the society to enact stricter law to prevent from this kind of malice to damage any other’s mental health.
In addition, gossiping and whispering other’s scandal is human’s nature. Who doesn’t like to know other’s secret or something that one tries to hide. Although it seems a little inappropriate for others to know other’s secret. However, usually by knowing from other’s experience can people know better about how to face or prevent the same experience in the future. For example, It can be often seen that some celebrity is caught to the jail or fine for illegal usage of drug. Although this negative information might make us feel uncomfortable for that nobody is willing to know infelicitous news, however, it truly ingrains the opinion that it is not worthwhile taking the drug just for the ephemeral happiness and the consequence is too heavy for one to take , which in fact successfully threaten people from breaking the law.
All in all, despite of some drawback from the scandal, it is truly powerful when it comes to focusing people attention to the problem. Additionally, it truly teach people a unforgettable lesson in a more different and effective way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, really, so, while, as to, for example, in addition, in fact, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1738.0 2235.4752809 78% => OK
No of words: 343.0 442.535393258 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06705539359 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76674220408 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.565597667638 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 704.065955056 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.8908140307 60.3974514979 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.235294118 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1764705882 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.76470588235 5.21951772744 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169038930302 0.243740707755 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0548396277617 0.0831039109588 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0713598023719 0.0758088955206 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124996786002 0.150359130593 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0800715712356 0.0667264976115 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 100.480337079 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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