The vice president of human resources at Climpson Industries sent the following recommendation to the company s president In an effort to improve our employees productivity we should implement electronic monitoring of employees Internet use from their wor | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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The vice president of human resources at Climpson Industries sent the following recommendation to the company's president.
"In an effort to improve our employees' productivity, we should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations. Employees who use the Internet from their workstations need to be identified and punished if we are to reduce the number of work hours spent on personal or recreational activities, such as shopping or playing games. By installing software to detect employees' Internet use on company computers, we can prevent employees from wasting time, foster a better work ethic at Climpson, and improve our overall profits."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

The author suggests that it is necessary to implement electronic monitor to improve the overall profits and forster a better work ethic at Climpson. However, author fails to address several assumption.
The author claims that employee who use the Internet from their workstations need to be identify and punished. Still, the assumption here is that using Internet doesn’t necessarily mean they involve themselves in personal or recreational activities. It is likely that the usage for Internet is to send an email to a very important clients. Even if workers are found entering the recreational pages or games website, it doesn’t indicate they are goofing around. It is possible that the recreational advertisement is bumped up from the website they are reading. Then, accidental touching the advertisement can lead them enter the page that they are not purposed going to. Furthermore, monitoring the Internet usage may transgress one’s duty of the job or find something that is ought not to be known by other workers. If the financial accountant is dealing with the wages of the workers in the firm, monitoring what others doing can lead to find others’ private information, which is not appropriate.
The author also suggest that by installing software to detect employees’ Internet use on company computers can prevent them from wasting time. However, It is possible that it might reduce efficiency for workers with the monitors. The rule or regulation provided by the firm might be too complicate, resulting to that it takes lots of time for workers to access the Internet. Also, it might lead to being late for the workers to participating in the online conference for the complicate process for using the Internet.
The author also thinks that by monitoring the usage of Internet can forster a better work ethic. However, indeed spending time on recreational activities is not appropriate, but monitoring one’s behavior can lead to spread the fear among the workers and may damage the mental health of the employees, which contravene to the work ethic too.
To strengthen the argument, author needs to address the assumptions as above mentioned.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 183, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun assumption seems to be countable; consider using: 'several assumptions'.
Suggestion: several assumptions
...mpson. However, author fails to address several assumption. The author claims that employee who u...
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Line 2, column 297, Rule ID: SEND_AN_EMAIL[1]
Message: Consider using 'email'.
Suggestion: email
...ikely that the usage for Internet is to send an email to a very important clients. Even if wo...
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Line 2, column 331, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'client'?
Suggestion: client
...is to send an email to a very important clients. Even if workers are found entering the...
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Line 3, column 283, Rule ID: TOO_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'to complicate'?
Suggestion: to complicate
...egulation provided by the firm might be too complicate, resulting to that it takes lots of tim...
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Line 3, column 471, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ticipating in the online conference for the complicate process for using the Internet. The au...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1821.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 349.0 441.139720559 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21776504298 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88932360624 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521489971347 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2237279447 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.117647059 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5294117647 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.35294117647 5.70786347227 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143071789177 0.218282227539 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0483772626956 0.0743258471296 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0557002546264 0.0701772020484 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0718241477295 0.128457276422 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0454137784114 0.0628817314937 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments