Is it as important for older people to learn and new things as it is for young people?
Through history, people have been trying to improve themselves physically and mentally. Thereby, they have put a lot of effort to find different methods to achieve this goal. One of the solutions to this issue is reading and learning, but the contentious question which arises here is whether it is important that elderly people learn something new and read as it is for younger people. It is my firm conviction that learning and reading for elderly people is as important as it is for younger people because of following elaborated reasons.
The first noteworthy reason is that reading and learning is act as exercise for the brain and makes the brain stronger. To put it differently, not only will learning and reading lead to higher mental abilities but also it will help to have a healthier mind. According to the recent studies at the University of Harvard, as people learn something new or read regularly the number of neurons of their brain increases which means that they would have a more powerful brain which will be able to do more complex task. Moreover, based on recent studies, statistics demonstrate that these kind of activities decrease the possibility of forgetting things which is a kind of disease named Alzheimer which is more prevailing among elderly people. Taking a personal experience as an example, during some days of my life, due to struggling with some problems, I could not read or learn something new; as a result, I had a lot of difficulties recalling all kind of information which I was given.
The second equally important reason which worth some words is that reading and learning will let the elder people to socialize far better because of the higher confidence which they acquire as they learn something new which will enable to do their required activities. As people become older they become more alone, and they need to socialize more than ever which help them to be happier and this result in being less exposed to depression. For this reason, by reading something new the older people will have a new topic to talk about and socialize more and have a happier time talking to others about what they had learned. Moreover, as people share something which they had learn and see that this knowledge has come in handy for others, feel much better about themselves and this way they will reach to a higher level of confidence. For instance, I can vividly remember the day which my grandfather was telling us the story of the book which he had read recently and her eyes were shining because was proud of himself because he thought that he has been able to make us more joyful.
To bring everything into conclusion, the reading and learning will let elderly people to accomplish a stronger and healthier mind. Moreover, these kind of activities will end up in higher levels of confidence for them. It is highly recommended that older people learn something new and read continuously because people at these ages are highly susceptible to some mental diseases which can be avoided using these activities. The abovementioned reasons are the ones convincing me to culminate in this idea.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: learn
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Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'learned', 'learnt'.
Suggestion: learned; learnt
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Message: Use past participle here: 'learned', 'learnt'.
Suggestion: learned; learnt
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Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, second, so, for instance, kind of, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.0286738351 209% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2594.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 533.0 407.700716846 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86679174484 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80487177365 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61087737898 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.450281425891 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 805.5 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.624813644 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.111111111 100.406767564 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.6111111111 20.6045352989 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319521054487 0.236089414692 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120085547853 0.076458572812 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104156104679 0.0737576698707 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.243640573507 0.150856017488 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.082564329086 0.0645574589148 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.56 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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