Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinion of celebrities such as famous entertainers, and athletes are more important to younger people than they are they are to older people.
In modern era, because of advancements in technology and developments of social media, eminent celebrities play a crucial role in life of people. Although, some may believe that the role of these celebrities in life of the younger people and elderly people is the same, some are not in favor of this idea and believe that older people care less about celebrities and their opinions. I personally contend that the younger people care more about the opinion of renowned celebrities because of the following reasons which are delineated.
The first mementos reason which is worth some words is that the younger people care more about the celebrities because they are less experienced to know that these celebrities are not a perfect human and are someone just like them. To put it differently, younger people depend more on their emotion that elderly people do and they do not think as logical as the older people do and they are less able to consider all the ins and outs of their decisions. For this reason, while younger people hear about the opinions of the renowned celebrities, they are less able to judge their opinions logically because they are obsessed with their popularity which cause them to think uncritically and accept their opinions. Researchers at the University of Harvard conducted an experiment on two group of people with different average age to recognize the effects of popularity of the owner of an opinion on the judgment and critical thinking process and the result of this experiment revealed that younger people's judgement was more affected by popularity of the owner of opinion.
The second equally important reason that younger people are less struggling with problems of real life and their mind is not obsessed with a lot of difficulties which they must triumph over them. In other words, younger people has less to do than older people because older people have more responsibilities in comparison with younger people so a larger portion of their brain capacity is devoted to this issues and are less able to keep track of renowned celebrities and know about the life of these celebrities which has a significant effects on the way people think about them because of all the obstacles which have tackled to reach their goals. Taking a personal experience as an example, as I was at high-school I was in love with Cristiano Ronaldo which is a prominent football player and I read all of highs and lows in his life and all he did to accomplish his goals. Taking all the difficulties he had endured and endeavor he had made into consideration I showed a huge respect for him and I has inclination to accept his opinions. On contrary, my father which was working hard did not have enough time to know about him as much as I did, so he my father's intention to accept his opinions was not as much as mine.
To bring everything into conclusion, not only do younger people have a stronger connection with the eminent celebrities because of being more active in tracking the news about them but also their mind is not overwhelmed with a lots of issues in real life to distract their attention from paying attention to these celebrities and their opinions. Due to the abovementioned reasons I believe older people care less about celebrities and their opinions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, while, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 86.0 52.1666666667 165% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2726.0 1977.66487455 138% => OK
No of words: 562.0 407.700716846 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85053380783 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86893614481 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70130438434 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.391459074733 0.524837075471 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 876.6 618.680645161 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 40.0 20.1344086022 199% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 91.4638324862 48.9658058833 187% => OK
Chars per sentence: 194.714285714 100.406767564 194% => OK
Words per sentence: 40.1428571429 20.6045352989 195% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.28571428571 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336737758209 0.236089414692 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145389214887 0.076458572812 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0954017995882 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.236732571315 0.150856017488 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0639033000594 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.5 11.7677419355 183% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.88 58.1214874552 53% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.9 10.1575268817 186% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.74 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.0 10.0537634409 179% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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