It is as important for old people to study and learn new things as it is for young people | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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It is as important for old people to study and learn new things as it is for young people.

With the development of the society, new technologies are booming, forcing people to keep update to advanced improvements. While young people are adept at studying new things in a relatively short time, it is often difficult for the elderly to acquire new skills and learn novel things. However, from my perspective, it is important for old people to learn new things as it is for the young generation.
Firstly, if old people fail to keep up with the development of the society, they would be left behind by it and have a hard time living in the modern society. Nowadays, technologies are advancing at an unprecedented rate. For example, mobile phones companies upgrade their products annually and constantly add new features in each update. Therefore, people always have to learn how to use the latest functions offered by the phone company; otherwise, they are not able to enjoy those fansy features. Take my grandfather as an example. He was not interested in modern technologies like many other old people, so he was unwilling to learn new features of his phone as young people do. But there was a time when he forgot to bring his wallet as he was in the market, he was frustrated that he could not use the phone to pay because the payment feature in his phone was not activated. After that, he tried to study his phone more often and got lots of help from the phone.
Additionally, learning new things help old people to keep the pace with young people, thus eliminating the generation gap. The generation gap occurs when young people’s understanding are different than that of the old generation, often triggered by the different acceptance to new things. The traditional thinking of old people would conflict with the modern way of thinking of young people if the former group does not change their mindset. Take me and my parents as an example. My parents used to reproach me for purchasing cartoon exhibits and toys because they thought they were useless and waste-of-money. But as they watched the cartoon that I recommended to them, they found it interesting too and even supported me to buy more exhibits. In this way, as my parents learned new things and recognized their values, the generation gap between us were gradually eliminated.
To sum up, old people should learn new things just as young people, because they want to keep up with the enhancement of the modern society and eliminate the generation gap with young people.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 197, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2032.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84964200477 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73794558006 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479713603819 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 630.0 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6687407355 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.947368421 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0526315789 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42105263158 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.449027848273 0.236089414692 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.147650162122 0.076458572812 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.162231672884 0.0737576698707 220% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.332692778407 0.150856017488 221% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.179575735223 0.0645574589148 278% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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