Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
Many people describe the boon of a country or state by the way the major cities appear. Some might say that a greater outlook of these cities might result in an increased amount of investors. This outlook may include the way the roads are structured, the absence or potholes in these roads, their accessibility to markets and banks and many more. The prompt argues that Government must make sure that their major cities get the financial aid they need in other to succeed. I mostly agree with this prompt for two reasons. However, I do concede that in some cases, Government should not interfere with finances needed in a major city.
To begin, major cities outlook may lead to more development in those cities. For example, in Lagos State, Nigeria, the biggest city (Victoria Islands -a place largely known for its large number of companies) was not as industrious as it is now. The governor of Lagos state made sure that the city had good roads and electricity among many others. These factors made investors to feel safe in locating their headquarters at Victoria Islands and today this city is one of the most industrious cities in Nigeria. Had the governor not supplied the necessary money needed by this city, it may not have been able to thrive. This shows an important case where funding was helpful to the city and the government by attracting investors.
Furthermore, major cities require financial funding for them to thrive. For example, the congestion problem in Cairo, Egypt could be reduced by the installation and maintenance of traffic lights. These require a lot of money to maintain and once it is neglected for even a short time, the living situations in these cities may become unbearable and the cities might start to decline. In addition, major cities might mean more population which could mean more crimes. If the governor does not support the city financially in terms of paying the salaries of employed policemen, the city may decline in ways that could be negative for the Governor.
Admittedly, in some extreme cases, the Government should cede financing major cities and focus on minor cities. For example,in Capetown, South Africa -home to the the elites of South Africa-, residents of the area prefer to use their money to fund the development of roads, electricity, water and so on. In this case, the governor investing on these cities may be redundant because there are other cities that need these financial support like Cape Verde. A country cannot be made up of major cities alone, so if minor cities are declining as a result of excessive focus on major cities, it may be detrimental to the country or state as a whole.
In conclusion, it is true that the government must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need. However, in extreme cases, I do concede that they should not receive these funding.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 18, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'cities'' or 'city's'?
Suggestion: cities'; city's
...eded in a major city. To begin, major cities outlook may lead to more development in...
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Line 4, column 123, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , in
...s and focus on minor cities. For example,in Capetown, South Africa -home to the the...
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Line 4, column 159, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...mple,in Capetown, South Africa -home to the the elites of South Africa-, residents of t...
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Line 4, column 159, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...mple,in Capetown, South Africa -home to the the elites of South Africa-, residents of t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, by the way, in some cases, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.4196629213 185% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2382.0 2235.4752809 107% => OK
No of words: 489.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87116564417 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52626353249 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460122699387 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 757.8 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.5640756631 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.565217391 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2608695652 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.73913043478 5.21951772744 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289451836308 0.243740707755 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103175598039 0.0831039109588 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0963206181773 0.0758088955206 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205233958162 0.150359130593 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0694707473653 0.0667264976115 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 100.480337079 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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