Claim: Many problems of modern society cannot be solved by laws and the legal system.
Reason: Laws cannot change what is in people's hearts or minds.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
How can laws and the legal system affect people and the society they live in as a whole? I agree with the reason that laws are not capable of changing people’s minds immediately, but I hold opposite opinion against the claim that legal system is feckless to solve many problems in our society. First, I will illustrate that laws can tackle a great deal of issues without changing people’s thought. Second, I attempt to argue that legal system gradually cultivate certain ideas in the society through law enforcement and regulation as guidance towards people’s behaviors.
To begin with, the efficacy of legal system does not hinge on its capability of altering people’s ideas, but mainly its compulsory enforcement which citizens have to obey regardless of their will. For example, considering an anti-social person who commits heinous murders and thinks it is justifiable to kill anyone as long as he wishes to. The laws may not be able to change what is in his mind, but it can put him in jail and thus prevent him from threatening the life of others. Following this, I believe that in modern society, the legal system is efficient in dealing with a large amount of issues through its execution. With law enforcement, people are forced to behave in ways that do not harm others, which enables the society as a whole to develop and prosper with stability.
In addition, there are actually scenarios that by regulating people to behave in certain manners, laws influence how people think and thus change their opinion gradually. For example, Chinese people did not regard spitting in the public inappropriate one or two decades ago. There were no law or regulation back then forbidding them doing so. However, it is enacted that spitting in public areas should be prohibited for the sake of sanitary in recent years. People who behave against it would be punished accordingly. With the law enforcement, citizens begin to realize the negative outcome of spitting and think it as boorish and lack of cultivation. Therefore, although laws might not be able to change people’s mind over night, they are influential in the long run.
To reiterate my point, I agree with the reason to certain extent since laws cannot change people’s thought in a short time. However, the claim negating the effect of legal system is untenable for the reasons that law enforcement, regardless of what people think, ensures the well functioning of our society in a powerful manner and can foster social fashion through its guidance step by step.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 312, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a powerful manner" with adverb for "powerful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, actually, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, then, therefore, thus, well, for example, in addition, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2132.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 425.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01647058824 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75808870184 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 658.8 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.3522468757 60.3974514979 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.444444444 118.986275619 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6111111111 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38888888889 5.21951772744 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.369985706666 0.243740707755 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115499503377 0.0831039109588 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0796794059274 0.0758088955206 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.240164546722 0.150359130593 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0694487301518 0.0667264976115 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 100.480337079 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.