Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

As society progresses, individuals are getting increasingly independent and the importance of family, especially the extended family, has largely reduced in the last decades. From my point of view, we have to admit that this is an inevitable social phenomenon accompanied with industrialization and urbanization. I will attend to more details in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, social advancement has separated family members further apart in distance. Thanks to the convenience provided by trains and planes, people could now migrate unprecedentedly longer than in the past. In the meantime, however, family members lose the chance to accompany with each other. My core family moved from a small town in the central China to the south about twenty years ago in pursuit of better living conditions, and I have not seen most of my extended family members for over five times ever since. Incredible as it may sound, my cousins, aunts, and uncles are, to some extent, like mere acquaintances to me. Naturally, it is hard to say that the extended family is as important to us as it used to be.
One subsequent outcome of long distance is that people do not rely on the extended family for as much emotional support as they did before. As mentioned above, the extended family members usually live near each other in the past when people could encourage, comfort, and care for each other. Thousands of miles away, nowadays, people would have to turn to other resorts when they need a hug. Moreover, individuals are connected to more friends in school and from workplace, who could share their happiness and sorrow. This is particularly true for the younger generation. I myself would sometimes prefer close friends to my parents when I need emotional support, let alone the extended family.
Another aspect in which this generation is less dependent on the extended family is material support. Now we live in a world where everyone could earn a living through honest work. Besides, the relatively perfect education system, public health system, insurance system, and bank system give citizens strong support jointly. Consequently, in the current, people do not need to ask for food or money from the extended family like they did in the time of material scarcity. Again, the extended family plays a less important role in the context of modern society.
To sum up, with the development of our world, people tend to communicate with their extended family members less frequently. Furthermore, they do not rely on each other for emotional or material support like they did in the past. Hence, I agree with the statement that the extended family has become less vital.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...support, let alone the extended family. Another aspect in which this generation ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, however, may, moreover, so, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2239.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 442.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06561085973 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.751463312 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536199095023 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 715.5 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.3110361897 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.347826087 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2173913043 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.78260869565 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250872934205 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0742034651119 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0601431458735 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143789834193 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0630844454605 0.0645574589148 98% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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