Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
How to educate children has become an increasingly heated topic in the society. Some people complain that it is much difficult to do so today than in the past since most of children's time is occupied by other stuff such as cell phone, online games and social networking websites. As far as I am concerned, the statement is not sufficiently supported and I will present my reasons for holding this opinion in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, educating children is not necessarily harder currently than in the past. With the help of more and more resources advising parents how to foster children in a scientific and effective way, I think parents nowadays master more knowledge than the older generations did in the past. They know how to deal with children's bad habits and how to cultivate them in an all-round way better thanks to children education experts. For example, if younger Chinese parents find out that their children tell lies, they might not hit the kids like their parents did. Rather, they will try to figure out why the children tell lies and what might be the psychological factors behind this behavior and how to tackle it properly so that the children's feeling are not hurt. While parents in the past might just resort to hitting and criticizing children, which is highly likely not going to work well. Therefore, the phenomenon described in the statement is not necessarily true.
Moreover, the time children spend on cell phone and things alike is not necessarily the reason that makes the education more difficult. Admittedly, children spend more time on cell phones, online games and social network than the past generations, which leads to the decrease of time they get to spend together with parents and stands in the way of communication between the two parties. However, what reduces the time for family companion most is the heavy burdens for both parents and children coming along with the development of society. In order to deal with the intense competition the former needs to devote more time to their jobs and the latter has to spend more time and energy in studying. As the result, they have fewer chances to really sit down and have a talk in depth, which naturally makes education a difficult task since they hardly have time for it. As we can see, the time devoted to work and study rather than the time spent on electronic products is the major cause to some difficulties in children education.
To put it in a nutshell, when we look into the issue of children's education, we need carefully exam the real situation and the various factors that caused it. As discussed above, the statement is tenable since it ignores many aspects of educating children and the causal relationship it comes up with is too absolute.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 369, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an all-round way" with adverb for "all-round"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, moreover, really, so, therefore, well, while, as to, for example, i think, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2293.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 474.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83755274262 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5818897766 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508438818565 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 711.0 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.7934616575 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.388888889 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3333333333 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.44444444444 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.329155417963 0.236089414692 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106195414726 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0894341094942 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194883020806 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103778096879 0.0645574589148 161% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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