Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The debate on whether an educational process in schools today is more complicated than in the past has garnered a range of views. Nowadays, many are adamant that a myriad of elements should be taken into consideration to check the constructive and destructive facets of this issue. Some people posit that teaching children has become a more complex task due to spending much time on cell phones. On the other hand, some others take the opposite side and disagree. From my vantage point, I agree with the former group. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
The first exquisite point to be considered is that the distraction caused by these technologies. Cell phones and the availability of various kinds of applications from games to social networks decline the attention level of students; therefore, decreases in the school achievements of students. A vivid example can shed light on this issue is one from research. In 2011, some researchers at Cambridge University have studied the influence of cell phone on the level and rate of student's distraction. Although they found that some applications in phones have positive impacts on the cognitive level of students, the majority of students showed a significant decrease in their attention and focusing on the schooling process.
Secondly, another reason which deserves some words to say is the negative impact of these technologies on the social skills of students. spending many hours on cell phones and video games would decrease the social skills of youngsters. For instance, another research from Colombia University has revealed that using cell phones for a long time will decrease the social intelligence of children. Moreover, the study has revealed that around 70 percent of the children who use cell phones regularly have shown a decline in the level of self-esteem and confidence.
To wrap it up, contemplating all aforesaid reasons, one can soon realize that cell phones and video games have negative impacts on the school achievement of students.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, i feel, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1741.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 334.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2125748503 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84873906871 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.550898203593 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.2863203659 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.8125 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.875 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8125 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195016064671 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0612353351341 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.050782685936 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108996293478 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0518131909322 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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