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Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.

In this modern world, educating children plays a significant role in society’s success. Most people agree that educating children is more difficult today compared to the past because of the development of technology. I believe that educating children at this age is more difficult from to the past. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following.
To begin with, education is more difficult nowadays in comparison to the past because children’s concentration is distracted by technology. It is no secret to anyone that education is of paramount importance issue that concentration plays a vital role in this area. Therefore, having concentration is crucial to put educating in the right way. Accordingly, social media and various applications that children use effect negatively on their brains and their concentration. Also, if they are allowed to bring mobile devices with them to school and use it at school may their concentration would be more distracted. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. For example, When I was in high school, I did not use a mobile device or social media so I could concentrate on my lessons at school. So, I used to get good grades at school. When I was accepted to the university my grades were disappointing in comparison to my high school’s grades.
Furthermore, although technology can be useful in educating children, it is more wasteful of time for children. Young people spend more time on social media and online games than ordinary should spend. Students should practice their lessons and solve their homework at home and during their free time. On other hand, children prefer to waste their free time on the internet and especially on social media. Accordingly, they like to speak with their friends on social media instead of practicing their lessons. Therefore, they would not completely learn what they have been taught at school. For instance, when I compare myself to my friend, there is a huge gap between the ways that free time is spent. He spends most of his free time on the internet and social media. His grades at school are dramatically low. The answer to this disappointing situation in his grade is clear, he does not correctly practice his homework and obviously, his lessons are not as exciting as his cell phone. As a result, he should spend his free time on his lessons, which can be significant for his success in the future.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that educating children in this modern world with the development of technology and gadgets is harder than it used to be in the past. This is because new types of equipment disturb their concentration and they are children may be waste their time.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 849, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...o, I used to get good grades at school. When I was accepted to the university my gra...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, furthermore, if, may, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2270.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 458.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95633187773 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88358106509 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.456331877729 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 702.0 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.4952085242 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.3076923077 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6153846154 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.07692307692 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277629293661 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0855651033172 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0779344444101 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176503398766 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0330175052597 0.0645574589148 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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