Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Human beings are social kinds of creatures. Indisputably, the innate social trait of mankind compels him to form communities and live within them cooperating with their members. During history, family has always been one of the most important social units in human societies. The question might arise now is whether extended family members are as important as they were in the past or not. From my perspective, extended family members are not of the same significance for many people as they were fifty years ago. Followings are the reasons to support my standpoint: being busy with working, not paying the same attention to old cultural values, and not being satisfied in terms of solving their problems.
To begin with, there are sufficient reasons to believe that people nowadays pay less attention to their extended family members as they used to in the past because they have to allocate more of their times to work hard within their jobs. As a matter of fact, with the rapid pace of modernization, the needs of mankind are expanding growingly. Therefore, to meet these needs, people work within their jobs almost non-stop from dawn to dusk, and they find less time to spend with their extended family members. The best illustrated example for this point is evinced by many employees who work during the week and allocate their free-times not for visiting their grandparents but for resting.
Moreover, it might be of a great interest to note that contemporary people overlook their extended families as old cultural values have lost their values. Indeed, being replaced by many other alluring aspects of modern life, old cultural values have faded their values to many young people. Therefore, many youngsters give precedence to allocate more time to hang out with their friends with similar attitudes rather than spending it with their extended family members. The empirical epitome for this point involves the case that for many people spending time in music clubs is more appealing than spending it with their extended families.
Last but not least, grandparents, cousins, aunts and other extended family members are seemingly of less importance to many people in comparison to the past as people nowadays mainly base their relations on meeting their needs. In fact, not having the essential expertise, many extended family members are being neglected by their relatives as those members are not capable of solving their problems. Accordingly, the more somebody is skillful nowadays, the more he/she will be noticed and given value by other people as he/she will eventually play a crucial role in eliminating the hampering obstacles of his/her friends’ lives and careers. The best shown example for this point involves many students who adore their studious friends and not their grandparents to learn something from them to expand their knowledge.
In brief, human beings socially inclined to live in communities and build up relations with members of those communities. However, it seems that the importance of different human communities such as extended families has been varying from past to today. Regarding the above mentioned reasons and examples, I conclusively think that extended family members are not as important as they were in the past.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 141, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, however, if, look, moreover, regarding, so, therefore, in brief, in fact, such as, as a matter of fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 52.1666666667 157% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2750.0 1977.66487455 139% => OK
No of words: 528.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20833333333 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79356345386 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59949995081 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460227272727 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 844.2 618.680645161 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.6120947305 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.952380952 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1428571429 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42857142857 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171653119048 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0662360324449 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0521110256056 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116855391297 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0289038905255 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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