Claim Many problems of modern society cannot be solved by laws and the legal system Reason Laws cannot change what is in people s hearts or minds Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason

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Claim: Many problems of modern society cannot be solved by laws and the legal system.
Reason: Laws cannot change what is in people's hearts or minds.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.

Laws are put in place by the governing bodies to ensure the well being and the safety of the people. Laws and legal system make sure that injustice is curbed and the rights of the people are protected. The claim in the prompt suggests that to solve the problems in the modern society, laws and legal systems are inadequate because the minds of the people cannot be amened by the them. I disagree with the prompt and feel that many problems of today's society can be solved with the help of laws for the following reasons.

Firstly, there is a purpose for making laws by the governing bodies. The purpose can vary from protecting the rights of minority to ensuring the safety of the people. When a law is implemented for what so ever the reason may be, the new law can sometimes draw ciriticism from those affected by the law. This may be due to that the people have not apprehended the law completely or may have been misguided by the oppostion bodies or as the prompt suggested - people are not willing to change their mind. However, if the governing bodies are disinterested, diligent and cadid about the purpose of the law, people can be convinced about the benifits of the law can bring to the people. The representatives of the common people can be called for a productive discussion and explain them what is the case and what is not the case with the law. The officials can even conduct debates so as to make the people realize the boons as well as the banes if any in an attempt to change the minds of the people. Thus, as we can see, many problems can be solved by the law and legal systems if people are made to realize the purpose of them.

However, in the realms of our discussion, one cannot ignore a few exceptions. It seems there are a few problems that cannot be solved by the legal system. I am qualifying my support against the claim in the prompt because I witnessed an event in my country where the law was not able to change the people's hearts or minds. Once in every year, people in my neighboring villages fight with sticks to claim ownership of an idol of village god. This has been in practice since ancient times and people believe that this practice should continue even if it seems preposterous in the present more civilized society. People are severly injured in such fights and human rights groups have urged the governement to pass a law prohibiting those fights. And when a law was passed against such practice, the government, to its dismay, received backlash from the villagers. The goverment eventually lifted the ban and the people continue to participate in such fights.

To recapitulate, many problems of modern society can be solved by the law and legal systems if the people are made to realize the purpose of the law. However, there a few problems in which people are adament against adhering to the law and therefore, not all problems can be solved by the legal system.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 376, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'them'?
Suggestion: the; them
...minds of the people cannot be amened by the them. I disagree with the prompt and feel th...
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Line 3, column 879, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
... The officials can even conduct debates so as to make the people realize the boons as we...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, as to, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2394.0 2235.4752809 107% => OK
No of words: 524.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56870229008 5.05705443957 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7844588288 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47214027738 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.400763358779 0.4932671777 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 758.7 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.340930411 60.3974514979 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.818181818 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8181818182 23.4991977007 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.54545454545 5.21951772744 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 5.13820224719 214% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.396119189814 0.243740707755 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130092304032 0.0831039109588 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0950526140295 0.0758088955206 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.282531473926 0.150359130593 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.074275869809 0.0667264976115 111% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.1392134831 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 48.8420337079 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 12.1639044944 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 100.480337079 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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