Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible.
Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which
of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples
to support your opinion. Be sure to use your own words. Do not use
memorized examples.
At some point or the other, young adults would have to make a choice whether to stay with their parents or to lead an independent life. And the choice they make turns out to be a good one or a bad depends on the personality of each individual. I personally prefer living with the family for as long as possible. I feel this way for the reasons that I will explicate in the following passage.
First, since the parents already would have lived a lot more time than their adolescence kids, they would obviously have learnt a lot more from their experiences. These experiences would help them to discriminate what is good for a person and what is bad. They would have the zeal to share their experiences with their children so that their children would not commit the same mistakes as they did. When their young adults live with them, they would have the chance to guide their children through every walk of life. Consequently, the longer the young adults live with their parents the longer will they be under the provision of their parents.
Second, which parent would not like to see their children staying with them? The very presence of their off springs in their eye sight would bring immense joy to them. The blisses that a parent would have seeing their kids around cannot match anything else in the world. In this world where people have to stay away from their parents for reasons like job opportunities or job postings, more and more parents are getting deprived of this joy. Increasingly, parents are yearning to spend time with their inklings. Parents take pride in their children for no reason. No matter how much time their children spend with their parents, the parents desire to have their children around cannot be quenched.
Finally, in this world where big families are being torn apart, the young adults and their parents staying together would provide a lending hand to both of them in difficult times. In this context I would like to quote an example which I witnessed myself. One of my cousins was studying MBBS. He used to live with his parents during his graduate days. Unfortunately, my cousin had severe stomach ache due to appendicitis. But luckily, his parents were beside him to rush to the hospital and save him from a fatal incident. He is now a doctor and works in a metropolitan city. His ailing parents still live with him and though he would have a hectic day, he would still get to take care of his parents. Is there anything that would give him the joy he is awarded for looking after his ailing parents? The answer is definitely no.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 126, Rule ID: EYE_BROW[1]
Message: This word is usually spelt together: 'eyesight'.
Suggestion: eyesight
... presence of their off springs in their eye sight would bring immense joy to them. The bl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, first, if, look, second, so, still, i feel
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2124.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 456.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65789473684 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3511022084 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482456140351 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 634.5 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.9911232754 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.6923076923 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5384615385 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.69230769231 5.45110844103 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317945176337 0.236089414692 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101239059451 0.076458572812 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0810867553786 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21240695716 0.150856017488 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0473675245275 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.45 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.87 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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